Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับประโยคให้เป็นธรรมชาติและชัดเจนมากขึ้น ต้องใช้โครงสร้างหัวข้อ-รายละเอียด และลดความซ้ำซ้อน ควรแก้รูปแบบไวยากรณ์ (tenses, articles, plural) และคำศัพท์ที่ผิดหรือไม่เหมาะสม (เช่น "wheel" ควรเป็น "view") รวมทั้งเชื่อมประโยคด้วย linking words อย่างเช่น 'because' หรือ 'so' ให้ลื่นไหล ตัวอย่างการแก้ควรอยู่ไม่เกิน 4-5 ประโยค

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help preserve my memories longer than just looking at them. If a view is especially beautiful, I often stop and take a few photos so I can remember the details later. Taking pictures also lets me notice small things I might otherwise miss.

提案: ประโยคไม่ชัดเจน มีคำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ผิดหลายจุด ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อตรงๆ ระบุว่าชอบชนบทหรือเมือง แล้วให้เหตุผลเฉพาะเจาะจง ใช้ linking words เช่น 'because', 'so' และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำ ให้ประโยคสั้นกระชับ ไม่เกิน 4 ประโยค

例: I prefer rural areas because I like green spaces and trees. They make me feel calm and help me concentrate. In contrast, busy urban areas often feel noisy and stressful to me, so I avoid them when I need to relax.

提案: คำตอบไม่ชัดเจนและมีคำผิดหลายคำ (เช่น 'wash wheel', 'Iceland', 'Gupta') ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคสั้นๆ ตอบคำถามโดยตรงว่าชอบภาพวิวในประเทศตัวเองหรือไม่ ระบุเหตุผลที่เฉพาะเจาะจง เช่น ความคุ้นเคย วัฒนธรรม หรือสถานที่ท่องเที่ยวที่สวยงาม พร้อมยกตัวอย่างสถานที่จริงอย่างถูกต้องและสั้น

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the landscapes well and feel a strong connection to them. My country has many beautiful places, such as Phuket, which has stunning beaches and clear water. I would like to explore more local scenery before traveling abroad.

× Yes, for sure I'd like to take picture in different view because I think that take picture can live in my memory longer than I look by myself.

✓ Yes, for sure I'd like to take pictures of different views because I think that taking pictures helps my memories last longer than just looking with my eyes.

Incorrect verb + -ing form: 'take picture' should be plural noun 'take pictures' and the verb phrase describing the action affecting memory requires the gerund 'taking' as the subject of the clause. Also use 'helps my memories last longer' for natural English. Suggestion: use gerund when an action is treated as a noun ('taking pictures') and ensure plural nouns when speaking generally ('pictures', 'views').

× But sometime if the wheel is too good, too beautiful, I would stay and looking at them.

✓ But sometimes if the view is very beautiful, I will stay and look at it.

Present tense and verb form errors: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb), 'wheel' seems to be wrong word and is corrected to 'view', 'would' is inappropriate for habitual/present situation so 'will' or simple present 'stay' can be used, and 'looking' should be base form 'look' after 'stay and'. Suggestion: use 'sometimes', choose the correct noun ('view'), and use parallel verb forms ('stay and look').

× Try to memorize more as.

✓ I try to memorize it more.

Sentence fragment and tense: missing subject 'I' and awkward adverb placement 'as'. Use present simple 'I try to memorize it more' to express current habit. Suggestion: include subject and use clear adverb placement ('memorize it more').

× I prefer you in Lulu earlier because I love to looking at green glass and green trees because I think that can make me feel more calm and be more focused on myself because sometime and furthermore sometime I looking at urban area it I feel frustrated and.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I love looking at green grass and trees; I feel calmer and more focused there. Sometimes when I look at urban areas I feel frustrated.

Multiple errors: 'you in Lulu earlier' is unclear; interpreted as 'rural areas'. 'to looking' should be 'looking' (gerund). 'green glass' is wrong word and corrected to 'green grass'. Run-on sentence and repetition removed; verb forms adjusted to simple present for habits. Suggestion: break long sentences into clear clauses, use correct nouns ('grass'), and use gerund 'looking' after verbs of like/dislike.

× I would say that I'm have never been in other country before so I prefer to wash wheel in my own countries.

✓ I would say that I have never been to another country before, so I prefer to travel in my own country.

Tense and verb/preposition errors: 'I'm have' is incorrect; use present perfect 'I have never been'. Use preposition 'to another country' not 'in other country'. 'wash wheel' is nonsensical; interpreted as 'travel' or 'visit', and 'my own countries' should be singular 'my own country'. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experience, correct prepositions ('been to'), and use appropriate verbs ('travel/visit').

× I think that will in my country is look really good.

✓ I think that places in my country look really good.

Incorrect sentence structure: misplaced words and auxiliary 'will' unnecessary. Use plural noun 'places' and correct verb agreement 'look'. Suggestion: form subject 'places in my country' and use simple present 'look' for general statements.

× Like there are many Iceland that look pretty like got Phuket or Gupta.

✓ For example, there are many islands that look pretty, such as Phuket or Gupa.

Incorrect nouns and spelling: 'Iceland' should be 'islands' (Iceland is a country), and 'Gupta' likely misnamed; corrected to 'Gupa' as guess or leave as 'Gupa' note. 'like got' is awkward; use 'such as'. Suggestion: use 'islands' for small landforms, and 'such as' to give examples.