Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar, and add a specific example. Use a linking word to connect your reason. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me relive the emotions I felt at the time. For example, a photo of a seaside sunset always reminds me of the calm and warmth I experienced that evening.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and correct grammatical errors. Use linking words to explain reasons and give a concrete example. Avoid vague phrases and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer urban views, especially city nightscapes, because the lights create a spectacular atmosphere. For example, Tokyo’s illuminated skyline looks vibrant and lively, which I find more exciting than rural landscapes.

提案: Start with a correct, concise response and fix grammar. State your limitation then give a clear preference or curiosity, using linking words and a specific reason or example. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words.

例: I haven’t traveled abroad, so I can’t compare directly, but I’m curious about views in other countries because they would offer new landscapes and cultures. For instance, I’d love to see European city architecture or tropical beaches to expand my photo collection.

× Yes I do. I like taking pictures of different views because when I see the picture again I can recall my feelings at that time. So it is important for me to remember the feelings when I see the that views.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking pictures of different views because when I see the pictures again I can recall my feelings at that time. So it is important for me to remember those feelings when I see the views.

Errors: incorrect article and demonstrative use ('the that views'), singular/plural consistency ('picture' vs 'pictures'), and awkward phrasing. Suggestions: use plural 'pictures' to match 'different views'; replace 'the that views' with 'the views' or 'those views' and change 'the feelings' to 'those feelings' for clear reference. Add commas to separate clauses and improve fluency. ID reference: Present tense issue (6) because verbs describe habitual actions and should use simple present consistently.

× I prefer view and urban, especially the night view because it's shining bright, it's so fantastic.

✓ I prefer urban views, especially the night views, because they shine brightly and are so fantastic.

Errors: incorrect article and noun form ('view and urban' should be 'urban views'), singular/plural mismatch, and incorrect adverb/adjective forms ('shining bright' -> 'shine brightly'). Suggestions: use 'urban views' (plural) to match general preference, 'they shine brightly' for correct adverb, and 'are so fantastic' for natural description. ID reference: Article errors (22) and Singular and plural issue (1).

× For example, the nice scenery of Tokyo is so good.

✓ For example, the scenery in Tokyo is very beautiful.

Errors: awkward adjective choice ('nice' and 'so good') and preposition use ('of Tokyo' is acceptable but 'in Tokyo' is more natural). Suggestions: use 'scenery in Tokyo' and stronger adjective 'beautiful' for clarity; keep present simple for general statements. ID reference: Present tense issue (6).

× So I prefer view in urban areas than rural areas.

✓ So I prefer views in urban areas to those in rural areas.

Errors: incorrect comparative structure ('prefer ... than' is wrong) and singular/plural ('view' should be 'views'). Suggestions: use 'prefer A to B' structure and make nouns plural when speaking generally: 'views in urban areas to those in rural areas.' ID reference: Incorrect conjunction use / Sentence structure errors (16/26) but primary: Sentence structure errors (26).

× I never been to abroad so I cannot say which I prefer but I would say different countries scenery because as I said before I never seen foreign countries view before so I want to go like randon.

✓ I have never been abroad, so I cannot say which I prefer. However, I would say scenery from different countries, because, as I said before, I have never seen views from foreign countries, so I want to travel to them randomly.

Errors: incorrect past tense and perfect aspect ('I never been' should be 'I have never been'), incorrect preposition ('to abroad' -> 'abroad'), missing articles and pluralization ('different countries scenery' -> 'scenery from different countries'), redundancy ('before' twice), and awkward phrase 'go like randon' (unclear; interpreted as 'travel randomly'). Suggestions: use present perfect 'have never been' and 'have never seen' for life experiences, use 'abroad' without 'to', use 'scenery from different countries' or 'views from foreign countries', and clarify intent with 'travel to them' or 'visit them.' ID reference: Past tense issue (5) and Incorrect use of prepositions (11).