Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp, mạch lạc hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp; dùng tối đa 4-5 câu, tránh lặp từ. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng: "Yes, I enjoy..." (2) Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, which helps) và sửa lỗi thì/động từ (ví dụ "taking pictures helps me to slow down"), (3) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn (một kỷ niệm hoặc ví dụ) để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views, especially in parks and museums. For example, taking pictures helps me slow down and notice small details like textures and colors, which I might otherwise miss. I often take photos during walks to remember interesting spots and calm myself.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời rõ ràng, tránh dùng từ thừa như "Oh yes" trước câu trả lời. Chú ý ngữ pháp (breath → breathe; sometime → sometimes) và cấu trúc so sánh/nhấn mạnh. Dùng một câu chủ đề, một hoặc hai câu giải thích có liên từ (because, however) và một chi tiết cụ thể.

例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and offer wide open spaces. For instance, I enjoy walking through fields to breathe fresh air and sometimes admiring mountains in the distance. However, I also like urban views when I'm looking for entertainment or interesting architecture.

提案: Cải thiện: Rõ ràng hơn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (lake → lakes; on weekend → on weekends; see place I grew up near → see places I grew up near). Thêm liên từ để kết nối lý do và ví dụ (for example, because), giới hạn 3-4 câu, đưa chi tiết cụ thể (tên địa điểm hoặc hoạt động) để tăng tính thuyết phục.

例: I generally prefer views in my own country because they remind me of home. For example, I often visit nearby mountains and lakes on weekends to relax and revisit places I grew up near. Nevertheless, I also enjoy views abroad when I travel because they offer new cultures and landscapes.

× Oh yes, I enjoy taking photographs, different views, especially in the park or a museum.

✓ Oh yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views, especially in the park or in a museum.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (taking) which is correct, but the noun phrase needs a preposition 'of' to link 'photographs' and 'different views'. Also add 'in a museum' for parallel prepositional structure. Suggestion: use 'photographs of different views' and keep parallel phrasing.

× Taking picture Help me load, help me focus more details and relax.

✓ Taking pictures helps me slow down, focus on more details, and relax.

Sentence had capitalization and verb agreement errors and wrong word choice. 'Taking pictures' is the subject (plural gerund phrase) so the verb should be 'helps' (singular). 'Help me load' seems to be incorrect; likely 'slow down' is intended. Use parallel verbs 'focus on' and 'relax'. Suggestion: form a clear subject-verb structure and maintain parallelism.

× And I often love photos during a walk to remember the place.

✓ And I often take photos during a walk to remember the place.

The verb 'love' is not appropriate with 'photos during a walk'—the intended action is to take photos. Use present simple 'take' for habitual actions. Suggestion: replace 'love photos' with 'take photos' to express the habitual activity.

× For example, I like walking through the fields to breath fresh air and sometime admire the mountain in the distance.

✓ For example, I like walking through the fields to breathe fresh air and sometimes admire the mountains in the distance.

The word 'breath' (noun) is incorrect; use the verb 'breathe'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb). 'Mountain' should be plural or 'the mountain' depending on meaning; 'mountains' fits general scenery. Suggestion: use correct verb form and adverb and adjust noun number.

× However, I also enjoy urban views when I want to more entertainment.

✓ However, I also enjoy urban views when I want more entertainment.

Extra 'to' is incorrect before 'more entertainment'. The correct structure is 'want more'. Suggestion: remove 'to' when using 'want' followed by a noun phrase.

× Well, I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of homes.

✓ Well, I prefer views in my own country because they remind me of home.

The plural 'homes' is unnatural here; use the uncountable notion 'home' to express a general feeling of belonging. Suggestion: use 'home' without article to convey the intended meaning.

× For example, I like visiting local mountains and lake on weekend because I can relax and see place I grew up near.

✓ For example, I like visiting local mountains and lakes on weekends because I can relax and see the place I grew up near.

Several article and number issues: 'lake' should be plural 'lakes' to match 'mountains' or use 'a lake'. 'On weekend' should be 'on weekends' for habitual actions. 'See place I grew up near' needs article 'the place'. Suggestion: ensure plural/singular consistency and include necessary articles.

× But sometimes I also enjoy foreign views when I travel abroad.

✓ But sometimes I also enjoy foreign views when I travel abroad.

This sentence is already correct grammatically. No change needed. Suggestion: none.