Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and grammatically accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and provide a brief specific detail about what you enjoy photographing. Use one or two linking words if you add a reason or example. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos whenever I visit new places. For example, I like capturing street scenes and sunsets because they remind me of the atmosphere of each location.

提案: Good clear preference and reason; improve natural phrasing and specificity. Combine ideas using a linking word and correct small errors (e.g., “on the horizon,” “coastlines” singular/plural consistency). Keep within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer rural areas, especially coastlines, because I love wide open skies and peaceful landscapes. For example, I enjoy photographing the horizon at sunrise since the light and colours change slowly.

提案: Avoid vague phrases like “I suppose” and correct grammar (subject–verb agreement). Be more specific about what you like in each case and use a linking word to contrast. Limit to 2–3 sentences and give a concrete example.

例: I generally prefer scenery in my own country because I am familiar with its landscapes and culture. However, I also enjoy visiting European countries for their historic towns and old architecture, which make interesting photo subjects.

× Yes, I always like to take photos when I go to different places and with every friends.

✓ Yes, I always like to take photos when I go to different places and with every friend.

The error is using the plural 'friends' with the phrase 'every', which requires a singular noun. Replace 'friends' with 'friend' after 'every', or rephrase to 'with all my friends'. Also 'and with every friend' is slightly awkward; consider 'and with my friends' if plural is intended. Use: 'every' + singular noun, or 'all'/'my' + plural noun.

× I prefer rural areas, especially for the coastlines. I am really into the places where I can see the clean sky in the horizon.

✓ I prefer rural areas, especially the coastlines. I am really into places where I can see a clear sky on the horizon.

Two issues: 'especially for the coastlines' is an unnatural preposition use; 'especially the coastlines' is more natural. 'Clean sky' should be 'clear sky' (word choice/adjective use). 'In the horizon' is incorrect preposition; use 'on the horizon'. Also 'the places' is unnecessary; 'places' is more natural.

× I suppose the scenery in my country, whether it's in urban or rural places, are perfect, but I also like those in other countries, especially Europeans, because they have longer history.

✓ I suppose the scenery in my country, whether it's in urban or rural places, is perfect, but I also like the scenery in other countries, especially in European countries, because they have a longer history.

The main error is subject-verb agreement: the subject 'the scenery' is singular and requires 'is' not 'are'. Also 'those' is vague; use 'the scenery' or 'they' for plural. 'Especially Europeans' is incorrect noun reference; say 'especially in European countries' or 'especially European scenery'. 'Have longer history' needs an article: 'have a longer history'.