Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and natural, but slightly formal and a bit repetitive ("take great pleasure" and "really enjoy"). Aim for one concise topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect the reason or example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views, especially landscapes. For example, I often shoot at sunrise because the light and colours are more dramatic, which inspires my art.

提案: Good direct answer, but pause filler (“Umm”) and the phrase “never in my life” are slightly exaggerated. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, then a concise reason with a linking word and a specific example. Avoid fillers and hyperbole.

例: I prefer rural views because I like the tranquility and natural textures. For instance, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and the seaside, where there are more natural colours and fewer distractions.

提案: Your answer is honest and includes an opinion, which is good. Improve coherence by starting with a clear topic sentence (preference), then supporting it with a reason and an example using a linking word. Avoid vague adjectives like "so breathtaking" without specifics.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't travelled abroad yet, and Algeria has diverse landscapes. For example, the desert dunes and coastal cliffs near Oran offer dramatic scenery that I love to photograph.

× Yes, I do take great pleasure in photography, especially landscapes.

✓ Yes, I take great pleasure in photography, especially landscape photography.

The original uses an auxiliary 'do' unnecessarily for a simple present affirmative sentence. Removing 'do' creates the standard present simple form: 'I take great pleasure.' Also 'landscapes' as a plural noun is acceptable but 'landscape photography' is a clearer collocation. Suggestion: use simple present without unnecessary 'do' for statements of preference or habit.

× It makes me feel inspired.

✓ They make me feel inspired.

The pronoun should agree with the plural noun referred to earlier ('those moments' or 'landscapes'), which is plural, so the verb should use plural subject with 'make' rather than 'makes'. Ensure pronoun and verb agree with the intended antecedent: 'Those moments make me feel inspired.'

× Umm, in fact, I have never in my life painted a city.

✓ Umm, in fact, I have never painted a city in my life.

The sentence uses the present perfect correctly but the word order is awkward. Moving 'in my life' to the end makes the sentence more natural in English. This is a matter of natural word order rather than tense change.

× It's always countryside, landscapes and the sea.

✓ It's always the countryside, the landscapes, and the sea.

List items in English often require articles or parallel structure. Adding 'the' before 'countryside' and 'landscapes' makes the items parallel and clearer. This fixes noun phrase structure and improves grammaticality.

× Honestly, I have never had the opportunity to visit other countries.

✓ Honestly, I have never had the opportunity to visit other countries.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed. Keep present perfect to describe life experience. (Included to indicate checked sentence.)

× However, I do think the countryside in Algeria is so breathtaking and it really deserves a visit.

✓ However, I do think the Algerian countryside is breathtaking and really deserves a visit.

'Countryside in Algeria' is acceptable but 'Algerian countryside' is a more natural adjective-noun order. 'So breathtaking' is colloquial; removing 'so' tightens formality. Also avoid repeating 'it' when combining clauses: 'is breathtaking and really deserves a visit.' This makes the sentence more concise and idiomatic.