Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь давать более структурированный и естественный ответ: начните с ясного топик‑предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали и пример, избегая повторов и междометий. Также используйте более формальные варианты (например, "mother" вместо "mommy") и ограничьте ответ до 3–4 предложений. Например, дайте причину увлечения и короткий пример, где вы недавно фотографировали.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love capturing natural light and composition. For example, I often photograph parks and gardens near my home, where I experiment with framing and depth of field. My mother is a photographer and inspired me to practice every day, which helped me improve my skills.

提案: Дайте более связный и развёрнутый ответ, используя связующие слова (for example, because, therefore) и конкретные описания. Избегайте общих фраз вроде "fascinating natural scenes" без примера — лучше назвать конкретные элементы (леса, поля, озёра) и объяснить, почему они вам нравятся. Ограничьте количество предложений до 3–4 и улучшите грамматику (например, "I'm a fan of the countryside").

例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy the peace and natural scenery of the countryside. For example, I love seeing rolling fields, forests and farm animals, which make me feel relaxed and connected to nature. That is why I dream of living near mountains or the sea.

提案: Сделайте ответ более естественным и точным: начните с прямого утверждения, затем объясните причину с конкретными деталями и закончите примером. Избегайте разговорных выражений "mad about" и законченных фраз типа "I wish I would" — лучше сказать "I would like to visit". Ограничьтесь 2–3 предложениями и укажите, что именно привлекает вас в другой стране (достопримечательности, культура, пейзажи).

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy exploring different landscapes and cultures. For instance, I would love to visit France to see its historic architecture, scenic countryside and famous museums, and to practice the language while traveling.

× My mommy is a photographer and this is my hobby too because my mommy is my role model.

✓ My mommy is a photographer, and this is my hobby too because she is my role model.

Sentence repeats 'my mommy' unnecessarily; use of pronoun improves cohesion and avoids redundancy. Also add comma before conjunction joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: replace repeated noun with appropriate pronoun (she) to make sentence natural and concise.

× I'm fan of countryside and farm animals and fascinating natural scenes there.

✓ I'm a fan of the countryside, farm animals, and the fascinating natural scenes there.

Missing article 'a' before 'fan' is an article error and affects grammar. Also 'countryside' usually takes 'the' when referring to rural areas in general; commas improve list clarity. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and commas in lists.

× It's my biggest dream to live next to mountains or seas or rivers.

✓ My biggest dream is to live next to mountains, the sea, or rivers.

Original word order and use of 'It's my biggest dream to live' is acceptable but can be made more natural as 'My biggest dream is to live...' Also use definite article 'the sea' when referring to the sea in general and commas for list clarity. Suggestion: reorder to 'My biggest dream is...' and apply articles correctly.

× I prefer views in other countries because I am mad about exploring new areas and speaking new languages and buying souvenirs from different places.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I am mad about exploring new areas, speaking new languages, and buying souvenirs from different places.

No major tense issue, but comma placement in the list is needed (serial/Oxford comma optional) to separate gerund phrases. Suggestion: add commas between items in a list to improve readability.

× My dream country is France and I wish I would.

✓ My dream country is France, and I wish I could visit it someday.

'I wish I would' is ungrammatical in this context. Wishes about unreal or future experiences typically use 'I wish I could...' or 'I hope to...' Provide clear object ('visit it') for the verb. Suggestion: replace with 'I wish I could visit it someday' or 'I hope to visit it someday'.