Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure (use correct verb forms and articles), be more concise, and add one or two specific details. Keep answers natural and within 2–4 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' or 'so').

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because I enjoy capturing moments. For example, I always photograph sunsets on the beach because the changing colors are beautiful, and I also take photos of natural landscapes like forests and mountains to remember hikes.

提案: Correct verb forms and prepositions, organize into a clear topic sentence followed by a contrasting detail using linking words (e.g., 'however' or 'but'). Avoid repetition and unnecessary lists; give one clear reason for each preference.

例: It depends on my mood. If I'm relaxed, I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing skyscrapers and modern architecture; however, if I'm stressed, I choose rural views since peaceful countryside scenes help me unwind.

提案: Be direct and avoid awkward phrases like 'doing the analytical'. Use a clear topic sentence stating your conclusion, then support it with two specific comparisons and a linking word (e.g., 'while' or 'whereas'). Fix grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid trailing unfinished sentences.

例: I think both are equally appealing. In my country, views tend to be greener with parks, trees and flowers, whereas in other countries I often find more advanced urban landscapes and impressive architecture, so each offers something different.

× For me, I really into taking pictures like photograph.

✓ For me, I really enjoy taking photographs.

The original sentence omits the necessary verb 'enjoy' after 'I' and uses 'like' incorrectly. 'Really into' requires a form like 'I'm really into' or use 'I really enjoy'. Also 'photograph' should be plural 'photographs' or 'photography'. Suggestion: use a main verb ('enjoy') followed by the gerund 'taking' and plural noun 'photographs'.

× I really can't stand seeing the sunsets by not taking off the phone and taking pictures of it.

✓ I really can't stand seeing sunsets without taking my phone out to take pictures of them.

Several issues: 'the sunsets' is acceptable but plural 'sunsets' without 'the' is more general; 'not taking off the phone' is incorrect—use 'taking my phone out' or 'not taking my phone out'. Pronoun 'it' should match plural 'sunsets' as 'them'. Also 'by not taking off' has wrong structure; use 'without' + gerund phrase. Suggestion: restructure to 'without taking my phone out to take pictures of them.'

× And I also love naturals.

✓ And I also love nature.

'Naturals' is not the correct noun here. The intended noun is 'nature'. Use 'nature' (uncountable) to refer to natural surroundings. Suggestion: replace 'naturals' with 'nature.'

× I really love taking photos of different naturals landscapes.

✓ I really love taking photos of different natural landscapes.

'Naturals' is incorrect adjective form; use 'natural' to modify 'landscapes'. Also 'different natural landscapes' is the correct noun phrase. Keep gerund 'taking' as used correctly.

× So it's actually depend on my mood.

✓ So it actually depends on my mood.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'it' requires the third person singular verb 'depends'. The base form 'depend' is incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'depends'.

× If I am feeling chill, I would rather in the urban city views because I also like the buildings, sky, skyscrapers, the high building, the towers.

✓ If I'm feeling relaxed, I would rather see urban city views because I also like the buildings, the sky, skyscrapers, tall buildings, and towers.

Multiple problems: 'feeling chill' is informal; 'would rather in the urban city views' lacks verb—use 'would rather see' or 'prefer urban city views'. 'The sky' needs article; 'the high building' should be plural 'tall buildings'. Order and parallelism improved. Suggestion: add appropriate verb and correct adjective forms ('tall buildings').

× And if I am feeling stress I would prefer the rural view in the countryside.

✓ And if I'm feeling stressed, I prefer rural views in the countryside.

Use adjective 'stressed' not noun 'stress' to describe feeling. Tense/modal consistency: 'would prefer' can be used for hypothetical but here present conditional 'if I'm feeling stressed' pairs better with 'I prefer'. Also use plural 'views'. Suggestion: use 'feeling stressed' and 'prefer rural views.'

× If I am doing the analytical between the view in my country and other country, I would say it's equal.

✓ If I'm comparing the views in my country and in other countries, I would say they're equal.

'Doing the analytical' is incorrect; use 'comparing'. 'The view' should be plural 'views'. 'Other country' needs plural or 'another country'. 'It's equal' refers to 'views' (plural), so use 'they're equal'. Suggestion: use 'comparing the views' and match plural agreement.

× In my country it's very natural with green trees, flowers and the park and other countries it's an urban cities and the technically is higher than my country.

✓ In my country it's very natural, with green trees, flowers, and parks; other countries have urban cities and better technology than my country.

Several issues: 'the park' should be plural 'parks' or 'the park' if specific; sentence run-on needs splitting. 'It's an urban cities' mixes singular 'an' with plural 'cities'—use 'have urban cities' or 'are urban'. 'the technically is higher' is wrong—use 'the technology is more advanced' or 'better technology'. Suggestion: separate into two clauses and correct noun/verb forms and comparative expression.

× So it's.

✓ So that's how I see it.

'So it's.' is a sentence fragment lacking a clear referent and verb. Replace with a complete sentence expressing conclusion, e.g. 'So that's how I see it.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; use full clauses.