Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Mejorar la corrección gramatical y la claridad: evita muletillas (umm), corrige errores (photograph → photographs o photographs of), y organiza la respuesta en una oración principal seguida de detalles breves y específicos. Por ejemplo, menciona qué tipo de vistas prefieres y por qué, usando conectores simples para mayor fluidez.

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I often photograph landscapes and interesting street scenes because they capture everyday life and moods. For example, I like to photograph early morning light on buildings to show peacefulness.

提案: Hacer la respuesta más clara y estructurada: comienza con una frase directa que responda la pregunta (I prefer rural areas), luego añade dos motivos específicos usando conectores (because, although). Evita frases fragmentadas y muletillas.

例: I prefer rural areas, especially mountains, because the scenery is more peaceful and varied. Although I sometimes photograph museums when I travel, I usually choose natural views for their colors and textures.

提案: Organiza la respuesta para evitar repeticiones y mejorar precisión: declara preferencia equilibrada (I like both) y da un ejemplo concreto para cada caso usando conectores (for example, in my country...). Corrige errores de vocabulario y posesivos (streets of me → streets where I live).

例: I like both equally. When I travel abroad, I photograph the unique architecture and landscapes of the place. At home, I often photograph the streets where I live and the Avila mountain because they remind me of my culture and memories.

× I used to take a lot of photograph of umm, the views, the troubles I have or maybe in the street.

✓ I used to take a lot of photographs of, um, the views, the troubles I had, or maybe in the street.

Incorrect verb form and noun number: 'photograph' should be plural 'photographs' to match 'a lot of'. 'the troubles I have' conflicts with past time 'used to'; change to past 'the troubles I had'. Also small punctuation and filler words adjusted for clarity. Suggestion: Match noun number with quantifiers (a lot of + plural noun) and keep tense consistent within the clause.

× I prefer rural areas and in a mountain or if I travel or I got a trip umm of museums also but that's part of an urban area.

✓ I prefer rural areas and mountains, or if I travel I visit museums, which are part of urban areas.

Awkward preposition and article use: 'in a mountain' is incorrect; use 'mountains' or 'on a mountain' depending on meaning. 'I got a trip of museums' is incorrect; use 'I visit museums' or 'I go on trips to museums'. Also clarify sentence structure and subject consistency. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions with places ('in' vs 'on') and use verbs that match the action (visit/go to). Keep parallel structure.

× But I like to take pictures of anything that is aesthetic.

✓ But I like to take pictures of anything that is aesthetically pleasing.

Incorrect use of adjective where an adverb or adjectival phrase is needed: 'aesthetic' as an adjective should modify a noun; to describe 'anything' it's better to use 'aesthetically pleasing' or 'anything aesthetic'. Suggestion: Use 'aesthetically pleasing' to describe things in terms of appearance, or allow 'anything aesthetic' for a shorter form.

× If I, I, if I travel, I like to take picture of the place that I am.

✓ If I travel, I like to take pictures of the place where I am.

Problems with noun number and relative clause: 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' after 'like to take'. 'the place that I am' is unnatural; use 'the place where I am' or 'the place I am in'. Suggestion: Use 'pictures' with 'take' and use 'where' or 'in which' to refer to location.

× But when I'm in my own country, I like to take picture of my, of the streets of me and also the mountain that we have, the Avila.

✓ But when I'm in my own country, I like to take pictures of the streets where I live and also of our mountain, El Ávila.

Pronoun and noun errors: 'streets of me' is incorrect; use 'streets where I live' or 'my streets'. 'take picture' should be 'take pictures'. 'the Avila' should be 'El Ávila' as a proper name and include article 'the' only if appropriate in English 'El Ávila' or 'the Ávila' is less common. Also add 'of' before 'our mountain' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct possessive structures ('my streets' or 'streets where I live'), pluralize 'pictures', and use the proper name form for landmarks.