Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct minor grammar (e.g. 'in different views' → 'of different views' or 'of different places').

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I travel to another country, I like to capture city skylines and local landscapes because they show unique architecture and atmosphere.

提案: Answer directly and fix grammar (avoid 'the both areas', possessive errors). Use a linking word to contrast or balance and give one specific reason for each choice. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

例: I prefer both urban and rural views because they offer different experiences. For instance, cities have striking architecture and vibrant street life, whereas rural areas provide peaceful landscapes and traditional culture.

提案: Be specific and correct vocabulary (e.g. 'plague' is wrong — likely 'plains' or 'beaches'; 'improve buildings' → 'modern/interesting buildings'). Use a clear topic sentence stating a preference or say you like both, then provide two concrete contrasting examples with linking words. Avoid trailing off incomplete sentences.

例: I like views in both my country and abroad. For example, at home we have mountains, oceans and wide plains, whereas other countries often feature modern skyscrapers and historic architecture, so each offers something different.

× I do love taking pictures in the different views, for example, uh, taking pictures in different countries, uh, more views, different places, different vibes.

✓ I do love taking pictures of different views; for example, taking pictures in different countries, of more places, different scenes, and different vibes.

The main issue is incorrect preposition use with 'taking pictures' (should use 'of' not 'in') and some awkward noun choices. This falls under verb + -ing form because 'taking' collocates with the preposition 'of'. Also simplify and parallel the list for clarity. Suggestion: use 'take pictures of' and maintain parallel structure when listing items.

× I prefer the both areas because urban and rural's has a different views, different place, different people, different culture and many more to explore.

✓ I prefer both areas because urban and rural areas have different views, different places, different people, different cultures, and many more things to explore.

Multiple plural and possessive errors: 'the both' is incorrect (use 'both'), 'rural's' incorrectly shows possessive; 'has' disagrees with plural subject; 'a different views/places/people/culture' has number mismatches. This is a singular and plural issue and subject-verb agreement problem. Suggestion: use 'both areas', plural nouns 'views/places/people/cultures', and plural verb 'have'.

× Every country has different views. In our country I see mountains, oceans and plague. However, in other countries we can see improve buildings and.

✓ Every country has different views. In our country I see mountains and oceans. However, in other countries we can see improved buildings and other sights.

Several tense and word-form problems: 'plague' is the wrong noun (probably meant 'plain' or 'beaches'); 'improve buildings' uses base verb instead of past participle adjective 'improved'; sentence fragment 'and.' incomplete. This falls under present tense and past participle form errors. Suggestions: choose the correct noun (e.g., 'plains' or 'beaches'), use 'improved buildings' or 'modern buildings', and complete the list with 'and other sights' to avoid sentence fragment.