Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and avoid filler phrases. Aim for 2–3 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g. "I don't take many photos" instead of "I'm not a big fan").

例: I don't take many photos of views. For example, when I travel I prefer to enjoy the moment rather than stop and use my phone, so I usually only take pictures on special occasions.

提案: Organize your answer: state your preference or say you like both, then give two clear supporting points with linking words (e.g. "Firstly", "On the other hand"). Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid fillers. Use more specific vocabulary ("wildlife" rather than "insects", "city architecture" rather than "plenty of the architecture").

例: I like both urban and rural views for different reasons. Firstly, in the countryside I enjoy wildlife and open landscapes, such as birds and forest trails. On the other hand, cities offer striking architecture and busy street scenes that are interesting to photograph.

提案: Be clear and correct mistakes in word choice and grammar ("scenery" not "salaries", use correct tense and articles). Start with a direct statement of preference, then give specific reasons and an example. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid vague phrases like "in a similar way."

例: I prefer scenery in other countries because I have lived in China for most of my life. For instance, foreign landscapes and local cultures often feel new to me — I enjoy visiting unique coastal towns or historic villages that are different from what I usually see at home.

× To be honest, I'm not a big fan of photography so most of my times even though I had a phone, I will not take a photos and open my camera. Yeah so.

✓ To be honest, I'm not a big fan of photography, so most of the time, even though I have a phone, I do not take photos or open my camera.

Errors: 'most of my times' is incorrect collocation and pluralization; correct phrase is 'most of the time' (singular). 'even though I had a phone' uses past tense incorrectly when referring to a general present situation; use present 'have'. 'I will not take a photos' mixes future with plural article and verb form; use simple present 'do not take photos' for habitual action and remove the article before 'photos'. 'and open my camera' should be parallel with 'take photos' using 'or' if choosing between actions; use 'or'. Suggestions: use correct collocations ('most of the time'), use present tense for habitual states ('have', 'do not take'), remove incorrect articles and ensure parallel structure ('take photos or open my camera').

× Actually, both of them has their own advantages.

✓ Actually, both of them have their own advantages.

Error: 'both' is plural and requires a plural verb; 'has' (singular) is incorrect. Use 'have' to agree with plural subject 'both of them'. Suggestion: identify plural subjects like 'both' and use plural verbs.

× In the countryside, I can enjoy the natural environments like I can see the birds flying in the skies.

✓ In the countryside, I can enjoy the natural environment; for example, I can see birds flying in the sky.

Errors: 'natural environments' is awkward here; use uncountable 'natural environment' for a general concept. 'the birds' and 'the skies' are unnecessarily definite/plural; use 'birds' and singular 'sky' for general observation. Suggestion: use uncountable nouns for general concepts and avoid unnecessary definite articles when speaking generally.

× I could, you know, visit all the insects in the forest.

✓ I could, you know, see all the insects in the forest.

Error: 'visit' is incorrect with 'insects' because we do not 'visit' insects; use verbs like 'see' or 'observe'. Suggestion: choose verbs appropriate to the object (people/places are 'visited', animals/insects are 'seen' or 'observed').

× And another, on the other hand, in the rural, uh, in the urban area, like the metropolis, I can take the photo of, uh, plenty of the architecture.

✓ On the other hand, in urban areas, like a metropolis, I can take photos of many buildings and pieces of architecture.

Errors: redundant connectors 'And another, on the other hand' should be simplified to 'On the other hand'. 'in the rural, uh, in the urban area' is confusing; choose 'in urban areas'. 'take the photo of, uh, plenty of the architecture' has article and word-choice errors: use plural 'photos', 'many' instead of 'plenty of the', and 'buildings and pieces of architecture' is clearer. Suggestion: remove filler words, use consistent singular/plural forms, and use appropriate quantifiers ('many') and nouns ('buildings').

× I prefer the salaries in the foreign countries mainly because I born and live in China for almost 18 years.

✓ I prefer the scenery in foreign countries mainly because I was born and lived in China for almost 18 years.

Errors: 'salaries' is the wrong word; context requires 'scenery' or 'landscapes'. 'the foreign countries' should be 'foreign countries' (no definite article). 'I born and live in China for almost 18 years' has tense and missing auxiliary: use past simple 'was born' and 'lived' for a completed period. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary ('scenery'), drop unnecessary articles, and use correct past tense forms for past events ('was born', 'lived').

× So actually I see all the landscapes in China like in a similar, you know, way.

✓ So actually I have seen many of the landscapes in China in a similar way.

Errors: 'I see all the landscapes' is awkward for experience; use present perfect 'have seen' to express experience up to now. 'all the landscapes' is an overgeneralization; use 'many of the landscapes' or 'many landscapes'. Remove filler 'you know' and keep 'in a similar way' without commas. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences and avoid overgeneralization.

× So I prefer to enjoy some of the unique landscape in the foreign countries and enjoy their local culture.

✓ So I prefer to enjoy some unique landscapes in foreign countries and experience their local cultures.

Errors: 'some of the unique landscape' should be plural 'some unique landscapes' and no 'the'. 'in the foreign countries' should be 'in foreign countries' (no definite article). Using 'enjoy their local culture' is acceptable but better as 'experience their local cultures' to reflect multiple countries. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items and remove unnecessary definite articles; choose precise verbs like 'experience'.