Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và tính tự nhiên: sửa lỗi như "take picture" -> "take pictures", thêm chủ ngữ/động từ chia đúng (ví dụ "when I go traveling"), và làm câu ngắn gọn hơn để tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ loại phong cảnh, mục đích chụp) và dùng liên từ phù hợp để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I do. I often take pictures of natural landscapes when I travel, especially mountains and coastal scenes, because I enjoy capturing atmosphere and lighting.

提案: Làm rõ câu chủ đề và tránh lặp từ; sửa ngữ pháp ("shows" -> "show", "take photo" -> "take photos"). Nên dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và thêm lý do cụ thể, ví dụ mô tả màu sắc, âm thanh hoặc hoạt động khiến bạn thích phong cảnh nông thôn hơn.

例: I prefer rural views because they feel peaceful and vibrant; the fields, trees and small villages offer more varied colours and quieter atmosphere than cities, which makes them better subjects for photos.

提案: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu và tính chính xác: sửa thành "I prefer other countries" và bỏ từ thừa như "Sir". Tránh diễn đạt vòng vo; nêu lý do cụ thể (muốn khám phá kiến trúc, phong tục, lễ hội) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Chú ý ngữ pháp như "take part in festivals" chứ không phải "take place".

例: I prefer views in other countries because I like exploring different architecture and cultural customs; visiting festivals abroad also gives me unique photo opportunities and fresh perspectives.

× I often take picture of nature when go traveling, or sometimes about the natural wonders when I travel to another place.

✓ I often take pictures of nature when I go traveling, or sometimes take pictures of natural wonders when I travel to another place.

Incorrect verb forms and missing subject: 'take picture' should be plural 'take pictures' (singular/plural issue). 'when go traveling' lacks subject 'I' and should be 'when I go traveling' (sentence structure/subject missing). Also 'about the natural wonders' is unnecessary; use 'take pictures of natural wonders'. Suggestion: include the subject before verbs and use plural 'pictures' when speaking generally.

× Often I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas shows me the peace and the vibrant of the scenery.

✓ Often I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas show me the peace and the vibrancy of the scenery.

Subject-verb agreement: 'rural areas' is plural so verb should be 'show' not 'shows'. Word choice/adjective form: 'the vibrant of the scenery' is incorrect; use the noun 'vibrancy' or adjective 'vibrant scenery'. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and use correct noun forms for abstract qualities.

× So I would prefer to take photo in rural areas.

✓ So I would prefer to take photos in rural areas.

Count noun and plural: 'photo' should be plural 'photos' for general activities. Also preposition: use 'in rural areas' is acceptable. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally and maintain consistency with previous sentence.

× I would prefer and other countries because you know that I would always want to travel abroad to another city and learn about new culture and also take place in some festival at another country. Sir.

✓ I prefer other countries because I always want to travel abroad to different cities, learn about new cultures, and take part in festivals in other countries.

Multiple structural issues: 'I would prefer and other countries' is ungrammatical; should be 'I prefer other countries' (sentence structure). Repetition and modal misuse: 'would always want' is awkward; use 'always want' or 'would like to'. 'another city' mismatches plural idea; use 'different cities'. 'new culture' should be plural 'new cultures' when general. 'take place in some festival' is wrong: the person participates, so use 'take part in festivals' and 'in other countries' not 'at another country'. Also 'Sir' is unnecessary. Suggestion: simplify to direct statements, match number consistency, and use correct verbs for participation.