Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct grammar (singular/plural), and add one specific example with a linking phrase. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often take photos of waterfalls and coastal cliffs because I like capturing dramatic natural scenery, which looks great in pictures.

提案: Clarify your opinion and complete your sentence. Use linking words to explain reasons and give a concrete example. Correct collocations (better options) and avoid trailing off.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer diverse architecture and street scenes. For instance, I enjoy photographing rooftops, markets, and modern buildings, which provide many interesting angles and contrasts.

提案: Improve grammar and vocabulary (geographic areas → geographic diversity; touristical → touristy). Remove repetition, use linking words to organize details, and give clear specific examples of regions. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Turkey has great geographic diversity. For example, the east has historical sites like ancient ruins, while the southern coast is very touristy with beautiful beaches and resorts.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. In my opinion, taking picture means uh, not just show yourself uh, on your back, uh, you have to uh, see a great views such as waterfall.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. In my opinion, taking pictures means not just showing yourself in the background; you have to see great views such as waterfalls.

Errors: 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' to match the subject; 'show yourself on your back' is incorrect phrasing and should be 'showing yourself in the background' (use gerund 'showing' after 'means'); 'see a great views' mixes singular article with plural noun and should be 'see great views' or 'see a great view'; 'waterfall' should be plural 'waterfalls' when used as an example of great views. Suggestions: use gerunds after 'means' or 'means' + clause, keep noun number consistent, and use natural prepositional phrase 'in the background' instead of 'on your back'.

× I prefer views in urban areas because urban areas give you better option and a different perspective.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because urban areas give you better options and a different perspective.

Error: 'better option' should be plural 'better options' when speaking generally about multiple choices. Suggestion: Use plural quantifiers for general, countable alternatives ('options').

× Uh my point of view find different perspectives more important than.

✓ In my point of view, finding different perspectives is more important.

Errors: 'my point of view find' has subject-verb mismatch and incorrect structure. 'Point of view' is a noun phrase; to express importance you can say 'In my point of view, finding different perspectives is more important' or better 'From my point of view, different perspectives are more important.' Suggestion: Use a clear subject and verb; use gerund 'finding' or make 'different perspectives' the subject with correct verb agreement.

× I prefer views in my own country because Turkey has a a huge geographic areas and it means you can find a lot of type of a lot of type of views.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because Turkey has huge geographic areas, which means you can find many types of views.

Errors: double 'a a' and incorrect article usage with 'huge geographic areas' (no 'a' before plural 'areas'); 'geographic areas' is acceptable but 'many types of views' is correct instead of 'a lot of type of a lot of type of views' which is repetitive and ungrammatical. Suggestion: Remove extra articles, use 'many' for countable 'types', and avoid repetition.

× The east part is more historical, the Southport is more touristical.

✓ The eastern part is more historical; the south is more touristic.

Errors: 'east part' should be 'eastern part' (use adjective form); 'Southport' seems incorrect — likely 'south' or a region name; 'touristical' is not a correct adjective; use 'touristic' or 'touristy'. Also punctuation: use a semicolon or separate sentences. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms ('eastern'), standard adjectives ('touristic' or 'touristy'), and correct place names or directions.