Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn cần trả lời trực tiếp, dùng câu ngắn gọn, ngữ pháp chính xác và tránh lặp từ. Cụ thể: (1) Mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I like taking pictures of different views). (2) Sử dụng danh sách hợp lý với liên từ để mượt mà (for example, mountains, beaches and forests). (3) Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và trật tự từ: 'I am a photography' sai — nên dùng 'I am a photographer' hoặc 'I enjoy photography'. (4) Giữ độ dài tối đa 3–4 câu, thêm chi tiết cụ thể nếu cần (where/who/when).

例: I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love photography. For example, I often photograph mountains, beaches and forests when I travel. These natural scenes inspire me and help me relax.

提案: Bạn cần câu trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời ngắn (I prefer rural areas.). (2) Nói lý do rõ ràng với cấu trúc hợp lý (because + lý do cụ thể). (3) Chú ý danh từ đếm/không đếm và giới từ: 'in the countryside' và 'there is/are beautiful scenery'. (4) Thêm 1 câu minh họa ngắn nếu cần.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more peaceful. For example, after a long day I enjoy walking by fields or rivers, which helps me relax and forget city noise.

提案: Câu trả lời rất lộn xộn và không rõ ý; bạn cần trả lời rõ ràng (own country/other countries) và giải thích cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) Chọn lựa rõ ràng (I prefer views in other countries / my own country). (2) Trình bày lý do cụ thể với ví dụ (different cultures, unique architecture, variety of landscapes). (3) Tránh lặp từ và âm tiết không rõ (MMM). (4) Dùng 2-3 câu ngắn, mạch lạc.

例: I prefer views in other countries because each place offers unique scenery and culture. For instance, I love seeing the architecture in Europe and the landscapes in Asia, which are very different from those at home.

× This I am a photography and I very like scenery. Uh, mountain, beach, forest.

✓ I am a photographer and I really like scenery, such as mountains, beaches, and forests.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and word forms. 'This I am a photography' should be 'I am a photographer' (noun form and correct subject-verb order). 'I very like scenery' is incorrect usage; in English we say 'I really like scenery' or 'I like scenery very much' ('very' cannot directly modify 'like' here). The list of places should use plural nouns and commas: 'mountains, beaches, and forests'. Suggestion: write subject first, use correct noun forms, use adverb 'really' or 'very much' to modify 'like', and use plural for countable nouns when listing examples.

× I believe for view in a rural areas because in a countryside there are very scenery help people convenient and comfortable after a long day.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside has beautiful scenery that helps people feel relaxed and comfortable after a long day.

Multiple preposition and article errors: 'for view in a rural areas' should be 'prefer views in rural areas' (use 'prefer' rather than 'believe for', plural 'views', and no article before 'rural areas'). 'in a countryside' is incorrect; use 'the countryside' or 'countryside' without 'a'. 'there are very scenery' is incorrect structure and word choice; use 'has beautiful scenery' and change adjective placement. 'help people convenient and comfortable' is wrong: use 'helps people feel relaxed and comfortable'. Suggestion: use 'prefer' for preference, correct articles ('the countryside'), use 'has' to indicate possession, and use verbs like 'feel' after 'help' or 'helps'.

× I prefer will in the world. I like the category in the country, all of the work or are placed because because every country they have MMM a lot of.

✓ I prefer places all over the world. I like different regions of each country because every country has many interesting things to see.

The original sentences contain incorrect tense and many unclear phrases. 'I prefer will in the world' mixes 'prefer' with 'will' incorrectly; for a general preference use present simple: 'I prefer places all over the world.' 'I like the category in the country, all of the work or are placed' is ungrammatical; likely intended meaning is 'I like different regions of each country' or 'I like various places in each country.' 'because because every country they have MMM a lot of' should be 'because every country has a lot to offer' or 'has many attractions.' Suggestion: use present simple for general preferences, simplify and clarify phrases, and use 'has' to show possession (every country has...).