Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and pronunciation mistakes (e.g., 'taking' not 'to taking', 'take pictures' not 'talk pictures').

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, whenever I visit a new place I photograph the landscape to remember the experience, and I often try different angles to capture the mood of the scene.

提案: Answer directly and clearly which you prefer most, then give specific reasons with linking words. Correct sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use connectors like 'however' or 'but' to contrast preferences.

例: I enjoy both urban and rural views, but if I had to choose I prefer rural scenery when I want to relax because it is peaceful and natural. However, I like urban views when I want excitement and entertainment because cities offer interesting architecture and lively streets.

提案: Respond directly (e.g., 'I prefer views in my own country') and give two specific supporting details. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'places' not 'bills' or 'it was my most favorite place') and correct grammar for clarity.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has a wide variety of landscapes, from historical towns to natural parks. For instance, I often visit a nearby historic hilltop village and a coastal reserve, both of which show very different but beautiful scenery.

× Yes, obviously I like it to taking pictures of different views, uh, because it shows a different uh, experiences and uh, whenever I visited a new place, I always look forward to uh, talk pictures and in different places, so I like it the most.

✓ Yes, obviously I like taking pictures of different views because they show different experiences, and whenever I visit a new place I always look forward to taking pictures in different places, so I like it a lot.

Multiple errors: 'like it to taking' is incorrect; verb like should be followed by the gerund 'taking' (Grammar Problem Type 8). 'it shows a different experiences' has number disagreement and incorrect pronoun: use plural 'they show different experiences' (Grammar Problem Type 1 and 12). 'whenever I visited' uses past tense but the general habit needs present simple 'whenever I visit' (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'talk pictures' is wrong word; intended verb is 'take' so use 'taking pictures' (Grammar Problem Type 8). Also 'so I like it the most' is awkward; use 'so I like it a lot' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type 13). Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions, follow 'like' with gerund, ensure subject-pronoun agreement and correct verb choice.

× Yes, I like both it and it also depends on my mind.

✓ Yes, I like both, and it also depends on my mood.

'Like both it' is ungrammatical; say 'I like both' (omit 'it') (Grammar Problem Type 26/27). 'depends on my mind' is incorrect collocation; use 'depends on my mood' (Grammar Problem Type 13 and 11). Use present simple for general preferences (Grammar Problem Type 6). Suggestion: remove unnecessary pronoun and use appropriate noun 'mood'.

× When I I need to relax and peaceful, my mind.

✓ When I need to relax and feel peaceful, I prefer quiet surroundings.

Sentence is fragmented and misordered. 'When I I need to relax and peaceful, my mind.' contains repetition, missing verb for 'peaceful' and unclear subject. 'Feel peaceful' is the correct verb phrase (Grammar Problem Type 10 and 26). Suggestion: rephrase to a complete clause using correct verb 'feel' and provide a clear main clause.

× I want to uh live in uh, Belize, uh, but when sometimes I like to explore and entertaining, this time I prefer to.

✓ I want to live in Belize, but when I want to explore and be entertained, I prefer the city.

Unnecessary fillers removed. 'like to explore and entertaining' mixes infinitive and -ing; use parallel structure 'want to explore and be entertained' (Grammar Problem Type 8 and 10). 'this time I prefer to' is incomplete; provide the object 'the city' or 'urban areas' (Grammar Problem Type 26). Suggestion: maintain parallel verbs and complete the sentence with the thing you prefer.

× Yes, I like bills in my own country because my country is a beautiful country and there are lots of landscapes are available and there are both historical place and natural place.

✓ Yes, I like views in my own country because it is beautiful, with many landscapes; there are both historical sites and natural places.

Many issues: 'bills' is a wrong word—should be 'views' (Vocabulary error but treated here as adjective/noun misuse) (Grammar Problem Type 13). Repetition 'my country is a beautiful country' is redundant; simplify. 'lots of landscapes are available' is awkward — use 'many landscapes' or 'many scenic landscapes' (Grammar Problem Type 11/13). 'historical place and natural place' needs plural 'historical sites and natural places' (Grammar Problem Type 1). Suggestion: use precise nouns, avoid repetition, ensure plural forms where appropriate.

× And I I it was my most favorite place to visit.

✓ And it was my favorite place to visit.

Double 'I I' is a repetition error. 'most favorite' is redundant: 'favorite' already implies the superlative (Grammar Problem Type 25 and 5). Use simple past 'was' only if referring to a specific past experience; otherwise use present perfect or present simple depending on context. Suggestion: remove redundancy and use 'favorite' alone.