Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and coherent with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, but there are minor issues: occasional redundancy, a few grammatical slips, and a slightly long response (aim under 5 sentences). To improve, remove repeated words, correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'in an album'), and add one specific detail or example to make it more vivid. Use a linking phrase to connect sentences smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially natural landscapes. For example, when I travel I photograph mountains and lakes with my phone to capture the light and colours. Because I keep them in an album, I can easily revisit those memories later. This habit helps me remember the trip and notice small changes in nature over time.

提案: The answer expresses preference but has repetition, some confusing content (e.g., 'common' and 'polluted water' contradicting tranquility), and multiple hesitations. To improve, state the preference clearly, give two specific reasons with logical linking words, and avoid filler words and repetition. Correct factual word choice (e.g., 'clean air and unspoilt nature' instead of 'polluted water'). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: I prefer rural views because the countryside is much quieter and less crowded than the city. For instance, there is cleaner air and open fields where I can relax and see wildlife, which makes the experience more peaceful.

提案: This is a clear, well-structured answer with a good reason and relevant supporting detail. To improve further, add a brief specific example of a place you visited or an architectural style you admired, and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., 'architectural styles and scenic landscapes'). Use a linking phrase to conclude the point succinctly.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they let me learn about local culture and history through unique architecture and scenic landscapes. For example, seeing ancient temples in Japan or colourful colonial buildings in Portugal always excites me and inspires new ideas.

× I often photograph them with my phone and I keep them in album so I can remember the trip and just revisit them later.

✓ I often photograph them with my phone and I keep them in an album so I can remember the trip and just revisit them later.

The noun 'album' requires an article. Use the indefinite article 'an' before a singular, countable noun that is mentioned for the first time. Suggestion: use 'an album' or 'my album' depending on intended meaning.

× Well, I prefer views in rural areas and the main reason is that the environment is much common and more tranquil than in the city.

✓ Well, I prefer views in rural areas and the main reason is that the environment is more common and more tranquil than in the city.

The phrase 'much common' is incorrect; 'common' is not typically modified by 'much' to compare. Use 'more common' to form the comparative. Alternatively, choose a different adjective such as 'less crowded' or 'quieter'. Suggestion: use 'more common' or rephrase to 'less crowded and more tranquil'.

× And there there is a lot of fresh air and and polluted water.

✓ There is a lot of fresh air and clean water.

The original sentence has repetition ('there there', 'and and') and a logical problem: mentioning 'polluted water' contradicts the positive context. Remove duplicate words and correct the adjective to match intended meaning. Suggestion: use 'clean water' or if you meant pollution, rephrase to 'but there is also pollution' with appropriate contrast.

× So you can always enjoy your your, your, your days here.

✓ So you can always enjoy your days here.

The sentence contains repeated filler words and unnecessary repetition of the pronoun 'your'. Remove the repetitions to make a concise, grammatical sentence. Suggestion: say 'enjoy your days here' or 'enjoy your time here'.