Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp, phát âm một vài từ và câu trúc để trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ 'scannery collector' không đúng) và nói rõ lý do với một câu chủ đề rồi thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I do. I'm someone who loves collecting photos of landscapes, so whenever I see a breathtaking view I always take a picture to remember it. For example, last month I photographed a sunset over the city skyline because the colors were incredible.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi giải thích ngắn gọn bằng chi tiết cụ thể. Sửa ngữ pháp (both of urban areas and rural areas → both urban and rural areas), tránh từ mơ hồ như 'maybe' và dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, for example).

例: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers something different. For example, cities have impressive architecture and lively streets, while the countryside offers peaceful landscapes and fresh air.

提案: Trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và ngữ pháp chuẩn (both of my country and in another countries → both in my country and other countries). Tránh lặp từ và dùng chi tiết cụ thể để minh hoạ (nêu ví dụ địa điểm hoặc cảm xúc).

例: I enjoy views both in my country and abroad because each place has unique attractions. For instance, my country has familiar coastal scenes I find comforting, while visiting another country I was impressed by dramatic mountain scenery that felt completely new.

× Yes I do because I am a scannery collector so if I miss some breathtaking view I will take photo.

✓ Yes, I do because I am a scenery collector, so if I miss a breathtaking view I will take a photo.

The student used 'scannery' incorrectly and omitted articles. Correct word is 'scenery'. Use the indefinite article 'a' with singular countable nouns: 'a breathtaking view' and 'a photo'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: learn correct spelling of 'scenery' and remember to use 'a/an' before singular countable nouns.

× Umm, I think I prefer both of urban areas and rural areas because in different country it will have some different scenery and maybe it also beautiful.

✓ Umm, I think I prefer both urban and rural areas because different countries have different scenery and maybe it is also beautiful.

Errors: 'both of urban areas and rural areas' is incorrect phrase; say 'both urban and rural areas'. Article and number error: 'in different country' should be 'in different countries' (plural) and 'it will have' is wrong subject-verb; use 'different countries have'. 'it also beautiful' misses verb 'is'. Suggestion: Use parallel structure for 'both X and Y', make noun numbers agree, and include the correct verb 'is' for adjectives (it is beautiful).

× I'd like views in both of my country and in another countries because in the country the view is so beautiful, but in another country the view is also like that too, and I think part of that views are so breathtaking.

✓ I'd like views both in my country and in other countries because in my country the views are very beautiful, and in other countries the views are like that too. I think some of those views are breathtaking.

Multiple errors: 'both of my country and in another countries' is incorrect quantifier and number; use 'both in my country and in other countries'. 'the view is so beautiful' should be plural 'the views are very beautiful' to match 'views'. 'part of that views' should be 'some of those views' (quantifier and demonstrative agreement). Also remove redundant 'also' and 'too'. Suggestion: ensure quantifiers match plural/singular nouns and use consistent demonstratives ('those' for plural).