Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition, correct grammar, and make answers concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., “when I travel”), and replace vague phrases like “natural landscape” with a concrete example. Avoid confusing words such as “movies” if you mean “photos” or “albums.”

例: Yes, I do. When I travel, I like to photograph scenery such as mountains and rivers because they change with the light. For example, I took photos of a sunrise over the hills last month, which captured bright colors and misty valleys.

提案: Good clear answer and relevant reasons. Improve by using smoother linking words and correcting small grammar issues (e.g., “allows me” not “allow me”). Add one brief specific example to make the response more vivid and natural. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer rural views because they are more vibrant and peaceful than cityscapes. For instance, walking beside a quiet river with dense trees helps me unwind after a busy week, and the fresh air always makes me feel refreshed.

提案: Fix grammar and word choice, and avoid short fragmented sentences. Use a clear topic sentence and then add specific details and one example. Correct phrases: “Bangladesh is full of greenery,” “it is a riverine country,” and use singular pronouns appropriately. Remove unclear phrase “I really love to that.”

例: I prefer views in my own country because Bangladesh is full of greenery, hills and many rivers. For example, the Sundarbans and the countryside near Sylhet have lush forests and winding rivers that create beautiful, natural scenes I enjoy photographing.

× When I when I am travel from one place to another place, I would like to take different scenery such as mountains, rivers and natural landscape.

✓ When I travel from one place to another, I like to take photos of different scenery such as mountains, rivers, and natural landscapes.

Error: incorrect use of present participle and verb form ('am travel'). Use base verb after 'when I' to describe habitual action. Also 'would like' implies conditional; 'like' fits the habitual context. Use plural 'landscapes' and 'take photos of' for clarity. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and correct noun plurals and collocations.

× I really capture those moments in my movies.

✓ I really capture those moments in my photos.

Error: 'movies' is an inappropriate word for still photographs; also collocation issue. If referring to photographs, use 'photos' or 'pictures'. If referring to videos, use 'videos' or 'movies' but context implies photography. Suggestion: choose the correct noun that matches 'take pictures' context.

× Seeing rivers, mountains, and dense trees helps me feel relaxed and allow me to unwind after a busy week.

✓ Seeing rivers, mountains, and dense trees helps me feel relaxed and allows me to unwind after a busy week.

Error: subject-verb agreement after a compound verb: 'Seeing... helps me' is singular, so parallel verb must be 'allows', not 'allow'. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent with the singular subject 'Seeing...'. Also no change to tense is needed.

× I do prefer views in my own country.

✓ I prefer views in my own country.

Error: unnecessary use of auxiliary 'do' for emphasis in a neutral answer. While 'I do prefer' is grammatical for emphasis, simple present 'I prefer' is more natural in this context. Suggestion: remove 'do' unless emphasizing contrast.

× My country is Bangladesh. Bangladesh is a food of greenery, hills, mountains and rivers.

✓ My country is Bangladesh. Bangladesh is full of greenery, hills, mountains, and rivers.

Error: word choice 'food' is incorrect; correct idiom is 'full of'. Suggestion: use 'full of' to indicate abundance and include commas in a list.

× Especially Bangladesh is a riverine country.

✓ Bangladesh is especially a riverine country.

Error: awkward word order and article use. Moving 'especially' improves flow. No article change required, but sentence placement of 'especially' is important. Suggestion: place adverb before the noun phrase or after the verb for natural English.

× Their view is vibrant and very natural and I really love to that.

✓ Its scenery is vibrant and very natural, and I really love it.

Errors: incorrect pronoun 'Their' refers to people, not the country; use 'its' for Bangladesh. 'View' is better as 'scenery'. 'I really love to that' is ungrammatical; use 'I really love it.' Suggestion: use correct possessive pronoun for countries ('its') and appropriate verbs/objects.