Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu để tự nhiên và rõ ràng hơn: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể và ví dụ. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "difference about it"; dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ: "variety" hoặc "differences"). Giữ câu không quá dài (tối đa 3-4 câu) và dùng liên từ hợp lý như "because", "so", "for example" để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. I enjoy it because each view shows unique scenery and different colors. For example, riversides often have calm reflections while mountains offer dramatic shapes, so I try to capture those contrasts.

提案: Cần phân biệt rõ urban (đô thị) và rural/countryside (nông thôn) và tránh nhầm lẫn (ví dụ: "rural views I can see city skyline" là sai). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu lý do cho mỗi lựa chọn, dùng liên từ so sánh như "while" hoặc "but" để rõ ràng. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể cho mỗi nơi (ví dụ: tòa nhà chọc trời, không khí trong lành, cánh đồng lúa).

例: I like both urban and rural views for different reasons. Urban scenes often have impressive skylines and vibrant street life, which are interesting to photograph. On the other hand, rural areas offer fresh air and peaceful fields where I can walk and take natural landscape shots.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và tính tự nhiên: dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer...), tránh lỗi như thiếu dấu nối/cách dùng từ ("a lot perfect views" là sai — nên "many beautiful views"), và cung cấp lý do cụ thể vì sao thích trong nước (ví dụ: văn hóa, cảnh biển, kiến trúc). Có thể nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về địa điểm và cảm nhận cá nhân.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam has many beautiful and diverse landscapes. For example, Hanoi has historic streets and lakes, Da Nang offers stunning beaches and bridges, and Ho Chi Minh City has lively night scenes, so I feel more connected to these places.

× Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because in different views I can see more beautiful scenery and difference about it.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because in different places I can see more beautiful scenery and the differences between them.

The student uses 'different views' repeatedly and then 'difference about it', which is unnatural and contains adjective/adverb usage issues. Use 'different places' or 'different views' and 'the differences between them' for clarity. Also replace 'difference about it' with the noun phrase 'the differences between them' to show comparison. Suggestion: Replace vague or incorrect adjective/adverb constructions with clear noun phrases and consistent terms (e.g., 'different places' and 'the differences between them').

× I like both. In rural views I can see city skyline and enjoy the fresh air, and in countryside scenery I can come down and walk in the field.

✓ I like both. In rural areas I can see the city skyline and enjoy the fresh air, and in the countryside I can relax and walk in the fields.

Prepositions and noun choices are incorrect: 'in rural views' should be 'in rural areas'; 'in countryside scenery' should be 'in the countryside'; use definite article 'the city skyline' and plural 'fields' if speaking generally. Also 'come down' is wrong in this context; use 'relax' or 'get away' instead. Suggestion: Use correct location prepositions and common collocations: 'in rural areas', 'in the countryside', 'the city skyline', 'walk in the fields'.

× My own country, Vietnam has a lot perfect views. You can visit Hanoi, Ho Chi Minh City or Danang. It's so romantic and beautiful.

✓ My own country, Vietnam, has a lot of beautiful places. You can visit Hanoi, Ho Chi Minh City, or Da Nang. They are very romantic and beautiful.

Errors include missing commas around appositive 'Vietnam', missing article 'a lot of', and wrong adjective 'perfect views' which is awkward; 'beautiful places' is more natural. Also 'Danang' should be 'Da Nang' and the pronoun should agree in number: 'They are' for multiple places rather than 'It's'. Suggestion: Use commas for appositives, 'a lot of' before countable nouns, choose natural adjective-noun collocations like 'beautiful places', and ensure pronoun agreement ('they' for plural).