Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบไม่ชัดเจนและมีความหมายสับสน ควรตอบตรงคำถามก่อนด้วยประโยคหัวข้อ แล้วอธิบายสั้นๆ พร้อมตัวอย่างที่เป็นรูปธรรม ใช้คำเชื่อมเมื่อให้รายละเอียดเพิ่ม เช่น 'because' หรือ 'for example' และจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 3–4 ประโยค

例: Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I enjoy capturing details and moods. For example, I often photograph food close-up to show textures, and sometimes I shoot street scenes to capture people's expressions. This helps me remember the atmosphere of a place.

提案: ภาษาและไวยากรณ์แปลกและมีคำใช้ไม่เหมาะสม ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคชัดเจนว่าชอบเมืองหรือชนบท แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลโดยใช้คำศัพท์ที่ตรงกับบริบท เช่น 'city lights', 'vibrant atmosphere' และใช้ linking words เช่น 'because' หรือ 'for example' ให้ประสบการณ์เป็นรูปธรรม

例: I prefer urban views because I love the city lights and the vibrant atmosphere at night. For example, walking through downtown after dark feels peaceful and visually exciting when buildings and signs are illuminated. This energy inspires my photography.

提案: ความหมายชัดขึ้นแต่ต้องปรับไวยากรณ์และความสมบูรณ์ของประโยค เริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงๆ แล้วให้เหตุผลสั้นๆ พร้อมตัวอย่างที่เฉพาะเจาะจง ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น 'because' และคำคุณศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'tranquil' และ 'uncrowded'

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often feel less crowded and more relaxing than my hometown. For example, I enjoy visiting tranquil countryside and uncrowded beaches where I can breathe fresh air and unwind away from busy city life.

× Yes, I was taking pictures of the front wheels because they captured my news and women.

✓ Yes, I take pictures of different scenes because they capture new moments and people.

The original sentence has unclear meaning and incorrect collocations (e.g., 'front wheels', 'captured my news and women'). This is a sentence structure and word-choice problem. Change tense to simple present to match general preference question, replace 'front wheels' with 'different scenes' or 'various views', and 'captured my news and women' with 'capture new moments and people'. Make subjects and verbs agree and ensure logical objects follow verbs. Suggested improvement: think about the intended meaning before choosing nouns; use common collocations like 'capture moments' or 'take photos of people'.

× However, I often focus on my positive success like seeds of food because I enjoy pictures and food in small detail.

✓ However, I often focus on small, positive details because I enjoy photographing food and capturing tiny elements.

The phrase 'positive success like seeds of food' is an incorrect and unclear adjective-noun combination. Use 'small, positive details' and clarify the activity with verbs 'photographing' and 'capturing'. Also change 'in small detail' to 'small details' for natural phrasing. Suggested improvement: use adjectives directly before nouns in the correct order and choose nouns that logically relate to the verb.

× I enjoy your scenery for its quiet, unnatural beauty, but I prefer urban use alone because I love the city lights and the vibrant and ambience.

✓ I enjoy rural scenery for its quiet, natural beauty, but I prefer urban areas because I love the city lights and the vibrant ambience.

The original uses incorrect pronoun 'your' and wrong word choices 'unnatural', 'urban use alone', and redundant articles. Replace 'your scenery' with 'rural scenery', 'unnatural' with 'natural', and 'urban use alone' with 'urban areas'. Also 'the vibrant and ambience' is grammatically incorrect; use 'vibrant ambience' or 'vibrant atmosphere'. Suggested improvement: check pronoun reference and choose appropriate adjectives; keep noun phrases concise.

× For instance, working on the illuminous trip at nights feel peaceful and visually interesting.

✓ For instance, walking on illuminated streets at night feels peaceful and visually interesting.

Tense and subject-verb agreement issue: 'working on the illuminous trip at nights feel' is incorrect. Use 'walking on illuminated streets' and singular verb 'feels' to match subject. 'Illuminous' is not natural; 'illuminated' or 'lit' is better. Use 'at night' or 'at nights' with care; 'at night' is standard. Suggested improvement: ensure subject and verb agree and use standard collocations like 'illuminated streets' and 'at night'.

× I prefer lives in other country because my own country often feels hectic and crowded, so I find it hard to relax there.

✓ I prefer living in another country because my own country often feels hectic and crowded, so I find it hard to relax there.

The phrase 'I prefer lives in other country' mixes verb forms and has article errors. Use the gerund 'living' after 'prefer' and 'another country' instead of 'other country'. Suggested improvement: after 'prefer' use a gerund or 'to' + verb consistently (e.g., 'prefer living' or 'prefer to live'). Use 'another' when referring to a non-specific different country.

× For example, when I travel abroad, I enjoy the tranquil countryside and uncrowded beaches where I can breathe fresh air and feel.

✓ For example, when I travel abroad, I enjoy the tranquil countryside and uncrowded beaches where I can breathe fresh air and relax.

The sentence ends with an incomplete verb 'feel' that lacks an object or complement. Replace 'feel' with 'relax' to complete the idea and match context. This fixes sentence structure and makes the meaning clear. Suggested improvement: ensure verbs have appropriate objects or complements so sentences are complete.