Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler phrases like "you know" and correct errors ("it's like a memories" → "they're like memories").

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel alone I often photograph streets and buildings because they remind me of the places I visited, and I use those images later to remember the trip.

提案: Provide a clear reason and a specific example; use correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases like "a lot of painting" with clearer vocabulary (e.g., "street art", "architecture").

例: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse architecture and street art. For instance, in my city I enjoy photographing colorful murals and old buildings, which give me interesting subjects and varied compositions.

提案: Give a balanced, grammatically correct response. Start with a topic sentence stating your overall preference, then explain with a contrast using linking words (e.g., "however", "on the other hand"). Avoid comparative errors like "more better".

例: I appreciate views in both my country and abroad. However, I especially enjoy views in other countries because they offer different cultures and landscapes, while my home country feels familiar and comforting.

× Yes, I do love taking pictures a lot.

✓ Yes, I really love taking pictures a lot.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but 'do love' is unnecessary emphasis and sounds awkward. Replacing with 'really love' is more natural. Keep the gerund 'taking' as correct for liking an activity. Suggest using 'I really love taking pictures' or 'I love taking pictures a lot' to sound natural. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Of course, when I'm alone I take a picture of everything and it's like a memories to me, though I love photography, you know?

✓ Of course, when I'm alone I take pictures of everything, and they're like memories to me, though I love photography, you know?

Errors: 'take a picture of everything' is acceptable but plural 'pictures' matches 'everything' better; 'it's like a memories' mixes singular 'it's' with plural 'memories'. Change to 'they're like memories' to agree in number. Present participle 'loving' not used; main issue is noun number and pronoun agreement. Suggest saying 'I take pictures of everything, and they feel like memories to me.' Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I prefer urban areas because a lot of painting and also you can capture a lot of beautiful things or beautiful landscape.

✓ I prefer urban areas because there are a lot of paintings, and you can capture many beautiful things and city landscapes.

Problems: 'a lot of painting' is incorrect—use 'a lot of paintings' or 'there is a lot of painting' with different meaning; 'a lot of' repeated is stylistically weak; 'beautiful landscape' should be plural or specified as 'city landscapes'. Added 'there are' to introduce plural noun. Also replaced one 'a lot of' with 'many' for variety. Suggest: 'I prefer urban areas because there are many paintings and you can capture beautiful city landscapes.' Grammar problem type ID: 14

× Of course I love my own country, but other country is more better than my country, so I do love both.

✓ Of course I love my own country, but other countries are better than mine, so I love both.

Errors: 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' or 'another country'; 'is more better' is incorrect—'more better' is redundant. Use 'better' alone. 'my country' repeated is awkward; use possessive 'mine'. Also 'I do love both' unnecessary emphatic 'do'; 'I love both' is natural. Suggest: '...but other countries are better than mine, so I love both.' Grammar problem type ID: 14}]} PMID:INVALID_CONSTANT} Technical note: trailing invalid field removed. continuous.