Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and add one specific reason or example. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain why and give a short example. Avoid unfinished clauses (e.g. "so").

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I started in high school when my mother gave me a camera, and since then I have photographed parks and city streets to practice composition.

提案: Give a direct preference sentence, use correct singular/plural and articles, and complete your thought. Add a specific detail and a linking word to explain why.

例: I prefer rural landscapes because they have more natural scenery. For example, I like photographing rice fields and forests since they change dramatically with the seasons.

提案: Respond directly, correct grammar ("my country", "many natural sceneries" or better "many natural landscapes"), and give a clear supporting example. Avoid vague adjectives like "idle" and use precise descriptions.

例: I prefer views in my own country, Japan, because it offers diverse landscapes. For example, Kyoto has traditional gardens, bamboo groves and scenic temples that are great for photography.

× When I was high school student, my mother gave me a camera so.

✓ When I was a high school student, my mother gave me a camera.

The sentence needs the article 'a' before 'high school student' and 'so' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect here. This is a past-tense statement describing a past event, so the simple past 'gave' is correct. Suggestion: add the indefinite article 'a' and remove 'so' to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× I think rural area is good landscape because rural area has many nature.

✓ I think rural areas have good landscapes because rural areas have a lot of natural scenery.

Countable/plural nouns must match: 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally, and 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' or rephrased. 'Nature' is uncountable and the phrase 'many nature' is incorrect; use 'a lot of natural scenery' or 'much nature'. Also adjust verbs to agree with plural subject: 'have' not 'has'.

× I love nature, so I.

✓ I love nature, so I like taking photos of it.

The original sentence is incomplete and missing a verb and object after 'so I.' It should state the resulting action, such as 'so I like taking photos of it.' Provide a complete clause to express the intended meaning.

× I prefer views in my 1 country because I live in Japan.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I live in Japan.

'1' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'own' to indicate possession. Also 'my own country' is the natural phrasing. No tense change required.

× Japan has many natural scenery, so for example Kyoto is natural and idle.

✓ Japan has many natural scenic places; for example, Kyoto is beautiful and peaceful.

'Natural scenery' is an uncountable noun phrase and should not take 'many' without rephrasing; use 'many natural scenic places' or 'a lot of natural scenery.' Describing Kyoto as 'natural and idle' is awkward and incorrect: 'idle' is not an appropriate adjective here. Better choices are 'beautiful' and 'peaceful' to convey scenic and calm qualities. Also punctuation adjusted for clarity.