Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับปรุงความเป็นธรรมชาติและความชัดเจนของประโยค หลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำคำและเติมคำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม ให้โครงสร้างชัดเจน (topic sentence + supporting detail) และลดความผิดไวยากรณ์ เช่น ‘to to’, การใช้ tense และ preposition ให้ถูกต้อง นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่เกี่ยวข้องอย่างเช่น “souvenir photos” หรือ “share my experiences” เพื่อให้ความหมายชัดเจนขึ้น

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I like to keep souvenir photos of places I visit. I also often share these pictures with my family and friends to show them where I have been.

提案: ตอบตรงคำถามด้วยประโยคหัวข้อที่ชัดเจนและใช้ linking words เพื่ออธิบายเหตุผล เพิ่มความเฉพาะเจาะจงในการอธิบายความต่าง เช่น ระบุลักษณะของเมืองและชนบท ใช้รูปประโยคที่ถูกต้อง (e.g. plural nouns, articles) และลดเสียงเติมคำว่า 'uh'

例: I prefer both urban and rural views because they offer different qualities. Cities are attractive for their architecture and lively atmosphere, while rural areas show everyday life and natural scenery.

提案: ตอบโดยตรงและระบุเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน ปรับไวยากรณ์ (เช่น 'there are many' not 'there is many') และหลีกเลี่ยงการรวมกลุ่มประเทศที่ไม่สัมพันธ์กัน (France ไม่ใช่ใน Middle East) เพิ่มรายละเอียดเฉพาะเจาะจงเกี่ยวกับสถานที่หรือเหตุผลที่อยากไป

例: If I had to choose, I would prefer views in other countries because they have many famous attractions. For example, I want to see the Eiffel Tower in France and ancient sites in the Middle East because they are historically and visually impressive.

× Yes, I'd like to take a picture different views because I need to to use this as memorial picture.

✓ Yes, I'd like to take pictures of different views because I need to use them as memorial pictures.

The original sentence has issues with countability and parallel structure. 'Take a picture different views' is incorrect: when referring to multiple views, use the plural 'pictures' and the preposition 'of' (Grammar Problem Type 8 and 11). Also 'to to' is a typographical duplication; remove the extra 'to'. 'This' should be plural 'them' to agree with 'pictures', and 'memorial picture' should be plural 'memorial pictures' or 'a memento'. Suggestion: use 'pictures of different views' and ensure pronoun and noun number agreement.

× Also I'd like to chat to my friends or my family where I I I visit where I have been.

✓ Also I'd like to chat with my friends or my family about the places I visit or have been to.

Problems include wrong preposition 'chat to' (prefer 'chat with'), repetition 'I I I', awkward clause 'where I visit where I have been'. The meaning likely intends 'about the places I visit or have been to'. Use 'about' to introduce topics and 'have been to' for experience. This fixes preposition and sentence structure issues (Grammar Problem Types 11 and 26). Suggestion: remove repetitions and use clear relative clauses.

× I'm in the middle of these question.

✓ I'm in the middle of this question.

'these question' mixes plural demonstrative 'these' with singular 'question'. Use 'this question' for singular, or 'these questions' for plural. The intended meaning is uncertain; likely 'I'm in the middle of this question' meaning undecided. Fixes demonstrative-number agreement and structure (Grammar Problem Type 26). Suggestion: choose matching demonstrative and noun number.

× I like both of these kind of, uh, area, the city beautiful in their way and rural area show the real life of people.

✓ I like both kinds of areas: the city is beautiful in its own way and rural areas show the real life of people.

Errors: 'both of these kind of' should be 'both kinds of' or 'both of these kinds of'; 'area' should be plural 'areas'; missing verbs and possessive 'its' not 'their' when referring to 'the city' (singular). Also 'rural area show' needs verb agreement 'rural areas show'. These are adjective/adverb and subject-verb agreement issues (Grammar Problem Types 13 and 27). Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple types and match verbs and possessives accordingly.

× If I have to choose, I would select uh, other countries because in other countries like France in the Middle East, there is many famous and very beautiful attractions.

✓ If I had to choose, I would select other countries because in places like France and countries in the Middle East, there are many famous and very beautiful attractions.

Use conditional 'If I had to choose' for hypothetical preference (modal/conditional correction). Also 'in other countries like France in the Middle East' is geographically unclear; separate examples 'France and countries in the Middle East'. 'There is many' should be 'there are many' to agree with plural 'attractions' (Grammar Problem Types 4, 11, and 27). Suggestion: use correct conditional form and ensure subject-verb agreement with 'there are'.

× I dream to visit there once in my life.

✓ I dream of visiting there once in my life.

Verb pattern: 'dream' is followed by 'of' + gerund when expressing a desire ('dream of visiting'), not 'dream to visit'. Using 'visit' without preposition is incorrect here. Also 'once in my life' is acceptable but 'someday' or 'one day' may sound more natural. This addresses verb + -ing form usage (Grammar Problem Type 10 and 8). Suggestion: use 'dream of visiting' or 'I hope to visit there someday.'