Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and natural, with an appropriate topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make sentences more concise and correct a minor grammar error (“what am I taking pictures of” → “what I am taking pictures of”). Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and avoid repeating similar points (you mention not enjoying photography twice). Add a specific brief example to make the response more vivid.

例: I don't generally enjoy taking pictures of arbitrary scenes; it depends on the subject. For example, I would definitely photograph a striking landscape like a sunset over hills because the colors and composition appeal to me. However, I usually don't take casual photos of everyday scenes since I'm not confident with my photography skills.

提案: Good direct answer and relevant supporting details. To improve, vary vocabulary (avoid repeating “rural areas” and “landscapes”) and add one linking word to show contrast with urban areas. Be specific about what appeals to you in rural views (textures, light, tranquility) to strengthen content.

例: I definitely prefer rural views to urban ones because I enjoy the tranquility and natural light found in the countryside. For instance, I like photographing rolling fields, rocky coastlines and old farmhouses where textures and colors change throughout the day, unlike busy city streets which feel cluttered.

提案: Your answer answers the question and adds personal context, but contains some word choice and grammar issues (“landscapers” → “landscapes”; “it and history” → “its history”). Make sentences more concise and provide a specific example of a place or scene at home that tells a story to make your point stronger.

例: Although I haven’t traveled much, I prefer photographing scenes in my own country because they feel familiar and rich in history. For example, I often take pictures of the old town’s narrow streets and faded shopfronts; each photo seems to capture a little story about the people who once lived there.

× ...it also depends on what am I taking pictures of.

✓ ...it also depends on what I am taking pictures of.

Incorrect word order for an embedded question. In indirect questions the subject comes before the verb, so 'what I am taking' is correct rather than 'what am I taking'. Rearrange to subject + auxiliary + main verb to form a correct embedded question. Suggestion: Use subject-verb order for indirect questions: 'depends on what I am taking pictures of.'

× If we were specifically talking about a nice landscape or view, yes I would definitely take pictures.

✓ If we were specifically talking about a nice landscape or view, yes, I would definitely take pictures.

Missing comma after introductory conditional clause and slight punctuation for clarity. The conditional structure 'If we were... I would...' is acceptable (second conditional). Add comma after the conditional clause and a comma before the 'I would' clause for readability. Suggestion: Insert commas after introductory subordinate clauses: 'If we were specifically talking about a nice landscape or view, yes, I would definitely take pictures.'

× But if you're talking about taking pictures in general, I mostly don't see myself doing it.

✓ But if you're talking about taking pictures in general, I usually don't see myself doing it.

Word choice: 'mostly' is not incorrect grammatically but 'usually' fits better with 'don't see myself doing it' to express typical behavior. This is a word choice/style improvement rather than a strict grammatical error. Suggestion: Prefer 'usually' for habitual actions: 'I usually don't see myself doing it.'

× I usually see myself taking pictures of rural areas, especially countryside, beautiful oceans and magnificent landscapes.

✓ I usually see myself taking pictures of rural areas, especially the countryside, beautiful oceans, and magnificent landscapes.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'countryside' and missing commas. When listing specific types, include 'the' with 'countryside' and separate items with commas. Also add Oxford comma for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'the countryside' and separate list items with commas: 'especially the countryside, beautiful oceans, and magnificent landscapes.'

× I prefer that over urban areas.

✓ I prefer that to urban areas.

Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A over B' in more formal English. 'Prefer ... to' is the standard collocation. Suggestion: Say 'I prefer that to urban areas.'

× Though I haven't traveled a lot yet, I would still say that I prefer to take pictures of my own country.

✓ Though I haven't traveled a lot yet, I would still say that I prefer taking pictures of my own country.

Both 'prefer to take' and 'prefer taking' are possible; 'prefer taking' is more natural when talking about general preference. This is a style suggestion rather than strict grammatical error. Suggestion: Use 'prefer taking pictures' for habitual preferences: 'I prefer taking pictures of my own country.'

× It has a lot of beautiful landscapers, old streets and in every picture you can just tell a story of it and history.

✓ It has a lot of beautiful landscapes, old streets, and in every picture you can see a story about it and its history.

'Landscapers' (people) is incorrect; the intended noun is 'landscapes'. Also improve 'you can just tell a story of it and history' to 'you can see a story about it and its history' for correct collocations and clarity. Added commas for list separation. Suggestion: Use correct noun 'landscapes' and clearer phrasing: '...beautiful landscapes, old streets, and in every picture you can see a story about it and its history.'