Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example and a brief reason. Use linking words and correct verb forms (e.g., "take photos"). Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially landscapes. For example, when I walk in the park I often stop to photograph a pond or a sunrise because I like to remember peaceful moments. Additionally, I sometimes edit these photos later to keep them as mementos.

提案: Clarify and correct facts and grammar. Start with a clear statement of preference, then give a specific reason and an example. Watch word choice (urban vs rural) and comparative language. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because the air is fresher and the surroundings are quieter. For example, after a long week at work I like to visit the countryside to relax and go for long walks, which helps me feel less stressed.

提案: Make the response accurate, concise and grammatically correct. Begin with a direct statement, then give one clear, specific example with correct tense and vocabulary. Avoid repetition and vague phrases like "the same."

例: I prefer views in other countries because travel exposes me to different cultures and scenery. For instance, when I visited Paris I was fascinated by the stunning palaces and the city landscapes, which felt very different from those back home.

× Yes, I enjoy beautiful landscapes when I am on a trip or when I simply hang out in the park. I will take photo to record the beautiful moment.

✓ Yes, I enjoy photographing beautiful landscapes when I am on a trip or simply hanging out in the park. I take photos to record beautiful moments.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a verb+ -ing form: 'enjoy photographing'. 'Hang out' when used after 'simply' should be 'simply hanging out' to match the -ing form. 'I will take photo' has two problems: countable noun 'photo' needs plural 'photos' for general habits, and present simple 'I take photos' is more appropriate for habitual actions rather than 'will'. Use plural 'moments' for multiple instances.

× Well, I prefer rural area to urban area because I think in the urban areas the air is more fresh so I could be relieved from my tiredness, especially after my work.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas to urban areas because I think the air in urban areas is fresher, so I can be relieved of my tiredness, especially after work.

Count nouns need correct singular/plural forms: use 'rural areas' and 'urban areas' when speaking generally. 'More fresh' is unidiomatic; use comparative 'fresher'. 'Could be relieved from my tiredness' should be 'can be relieved of my tiredness' or more naturally 'can relieve my tiredness' — 'relieved of' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'After my work' is better as 'after work' for habitual events.

× I prefer the views overseas. I remember when I travel to Paris, I was really fascinated by the gorgeous palace and the the landscape of the same.

✓ I prefer views overseas. I remember when I traveled to Paris, I was really fascinated by the gorgeous palace and its surrounding landscape.

This sentence recounts a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense: 'when I traveled' (past simple). 'The the' is a duplication error; remove the extra 'the'. 'The landscape of the same' is unnatural and unclear; use 'its surrounding landscape' or 'the surrounding landscape' to refer back to the palace. Also change 'I prefer the views overseas' to 'I prefer views overseas' to sound more natural (article optional).