Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., "a lot of"). Also keep answer under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I review old photos of landscapes or cityscapes, they bring back the emotions and memories I felt at the time.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity, use linking words and specific details. Replace vague phrases ("a lot of natures") with correct nouns and avoid unnecessary repetition. Limit to one or two supporting points and one example.

例: I prefer rural views because they feature natural landscapes like forests and open skies. For instance, I often photograph sunsets and wide fields, as these scenes feel more authentic and calming than crowded city streets.

提案: Be direct and organize answer: state your preference, then give one clear supporting reason and one specific example. Correct grammar (singular/plural) and remove fillers (uh). Keep it within five sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country, Japan, because it offers a strong contrast between modern cityscapes and peaceful countryside. For example, Tokyo's illuminated skyline is stunning at night, while rural areas have picturesque mountains and rice terraces that I also enjoy photographing.

× I prefer views in rural areas because they have a lot of natures and I love natures because I don't really like something that is artificial because I think it is a bit fake.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because there is a lot of nature and I love nature because I don't really like things that are artificial; I think they are a bit fake.

The word 'nature' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'natures'. Use 'a lot of nature' or just 'nature'. Also 'something that is artificial' refers to a singular item; in context it's better to use the plural form 'things that are artificial' and match the following verb 'they are' for agreement. Suggestion: Use uncountable nouns correctly and keep number agreement between subjects and verbs.

× My home country is Japan and Japan have a lot of nature and with city, for example, in Tokyo, there's, uh, there are a lot of buildings that are high and in the night view, in the night view is really good.

✓ My home country is Japan and Japan has a lot of nature and cities; for example, in Tokyo there are many tall buildings and the night view is really good.

The subject 'Japan' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have' (third person singular agreement). 'With city' is awkward; 'and cities' or 'and in the city' is better. 'A lot of' can be replaced with 'many' for countable plural 'buildings'. Also avoid repeating phrases like 'in the night view'. Suggestion: Ensure verb forms agree with singular/plural subjects and simplify redundant phrases.

× But nature is something that people preserved from a long ago.

✓ But nature is something that people have preserved since long ago.

The phrase 'from a long ago' is ungrammatical. Use 'since long ago' or 'for a long time' and include the present perfect 'have preserved' to show ongoing relevance. 'Preserved' requires an auxiliary when referring to an action continuing to the present. Suggestion: Use correct prepositional phrases ('since long ago' or 'for a long time') and appropriate tense for past actions with present relevance.

× For example, I love taking pictures of sky.

✓ For example, I love taking pictures of the sky.

'Sky' as a noun here needs the definite article 'the' because we refer to the sky in general. No present participle issue beyond article use; correction classified under present participle form because the verb phrase 'taking pictures of' is fine but the noun needs an article. Suggestion: Use 'the sky' when referring to the general sky and ensure articles are used appropriately.

× But if you go to rural area, that view is also beautiful as well.

✓ But if you go to a rural area, that view is also beautiful.

'Rural area' needs an article ('a') when singular. The phrase 'also beautiful as well' is redundant; use either 'also' or 'as well', not both. Suggestion: Include the correct article for singular countable nouns and avoid redundant adverbs.