Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and word choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words. Avoid repetition and limit to 3–4 sentences. Also correct vocabulary (e.g., “views” or “scenes” instead of “waves”) and article use (a photo of the sky).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often take photos of sunsets and rainbows because their colours are striking and change quickly. Also, I like capturing wide landscapes such as beaches or mountains because they make me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Answer directly, reduce hesitations, and use clear linking language to add details. Use accurate grammar (plural/singular agreement) and more specific descriptors (e.g., “scenic waterfalls,” “rolling hills”). Keep within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler words like “uh.”

例: I prefer rural views because they offer more natural scenery. For instance, I can photograph waterfalls, rolling hills and rocky cliffs, which provide interesting textures and colours. These landscapes also change with the seasons, giving me fresh subjects to capture.

提案: Give a direct answer and avoid asking back the question. Use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary (e.g., “take photos of my own country”). Provide one or two precise examples and a reason. Remove fillers and correct place names if needed.

例: I prefer photographing views in my own country because I know the best locations and local seasons. For example, when I visit my region, there are historic villages and coastal cliffs that produce dramatic photos. Also, being local helps me plan shoots at the best time of day.