Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, clear and natural. Start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then give 1–2 brief specific reasons using linking words. Avoid pauses, repetition and unclear words. Focus on vocabulary like “take photos”, “views”, “memories”, “scenery”.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me keep memories and relax my mind. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines when I travel, so I can look back at them later and remember the moment.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence that directly answers the preference, then add a linked reason and a specific detail. Use correct grammar for preferences (e.g., “I prefer rural areas”) and plural/singular forms (“mountains”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are peaceful and help me relax. For instance, when I visit the countryside I enjoy looking at green fields and mountains, and listening to birds, which makes me feel calm.

提案: Answer directly using present simple (e.g., “I prefer”), give one clear reason, and provide a specific example. Avoid awkward phrasing like “use other the countries” and repetition. Use vocabulary such as “different scenery”, “unique architecture”, or “cultural landscapes.”

例: At the moment I prefer views in other countries because they offer different scenery and cultural landmarks. For example, I love visiting Europe to see historic buildings and unique landscapes that I can't find at home.

× How are ya attacking picture for different views? Cause I want to have a memories from different views and I for my for my mind to **** *** mind.

✓ How are you taking pictures of different views? I want to have memories of different views for my mind.

Multiple sentence structure problems: 'How are ya attacking picture' is ungrammatical and likely meant 'How are you taking pictures' (verb choice and form). 'Attacking' is incorrect verb choice. 'ya' is informal; use 'you'. 'Cause' as sentence start is informal; use 'Because' or rephrase. 'a memories' mixes singular article with plural noun; correct to 'memories' without 'a'. 'from different views' should be 'of different views' (incorrect preposition - see ID 11 but main issue is structure). 'I for my for my mind to **** *** mind' is ungrammatical and unclear; interpreted as 'for my mind' and cleaned to 'for my mind'. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb-object order, choose correct verbs (take pictures), use correct articles and prepositions, and avoid repetitions.

× Umm well I for previous in rural areas because they are because they are peaceful of me and I find nature relaxing.

✓ Umm well I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful for me and I find nature relaxing.

Errors: 'I for previous in rural areas' mixes words; intended 'I prefer rural areas' (verb selection and order). 'peaceful of me' uses incorrect preposition; correct is 'peaceful for me' or 'peaceful to me'. This is a preposition error (ID 11). Also repeated phrase 'because they are' is redundant (sentence structure). Suggestion: use 'prefer' for preference, use 'for' or 'to' with feelings (peaceful for me), and avoid redundancy.

× When I visit the countryside I enjoy looking at green fields and mountain.

✓ When I visit the countryside, I enjoy looking at green fields and mountains.

Error: 'green fields and mountain' mixes plural and singular; should be plural 'mountains' to agree with 'fields' and general meaning. This is subject-verb/noun number agreement (ID 27/1). Suggestion: use consistent pluralization when listing multiple items and add a comma after the subordinate clause for clarity.

× As of now, I preferred use other the countries or outside the countries because other countries it's a different views and a beautiful beauty, beauty use and they have a they they have a.

✓ As of now, I prefer to visit other countries because they have different and beautiful views.

Errors: 'I preferred use other the countries' uses past tense 'preferred' incorrectly for a current preference; change to present 'I prefer' (ID 6 Present tense issue/ID 7 Future tense issue). 'use other the countries' is ungrammatical; intended 'other countries' or 'outside my country'. 'other countries it's a different views' mixes subject-verb and number: 'it's' + 'views' (singular verb with plural noun)—use 'they have different views'. 'a beautiful beauty, beauty use' is redundant and incorrect word choice. Overall sentence structure is broken. Suggestion: use present tense for current preferences, correct word order 'other countries', use plural agreement 'they have different and beautiful views', and avoid repetitions.