Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Habla con más claridad y de forma más natural: evita muletillas ("uh", "and jeez") y corrige errores gramaticales. Comienza con una oración tema directa, añade un detalle específico y usa un conector si amplías la idea. Por ejemplo, menciona qué tipo de escenas naturales prefieres y por qué.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially nature scenes. For example, I like photographing mountains and lakes because the light at sunrise creates dramatic colors. I also try to capture details like wildflowers to make each picture more interesting.

提案: Organiza la respuesta con una frase tema clara y evita repeticiones. Usa palabras de enlace para contrastar (e.g., "however", "on the other hand") y da un ejemplo concreto de lo que te gusta de cada tipo de vista.

例: I enjoy both urban and rural views, but for different reasons. Urban scenes interest me because of the architecture and busy streets, whereas rural landscapes appeal to me for their tranquility and natural colors. For instance, I like photographing old buildings at dusk and wide-open fields at sunset.

提案: Corrige la pronunciación y precisión léxica ("bills" → "views"/"scenery") y evita duplicaciones. Da una razón clara y específica por la cual prefieres paisajes extranjeros, y añade una frase sobre cuándo o cómo planeas visitar para hacerlo más concreto.

例: I prefer scenery in other countries because I enjoy seeing landscapes that are very different from my own. For example, Switzerland has stunning mountains and alpine lakes that I would love to photograph. I hope to travel there within the next few years and take photos during the autumn when the colors are most vivid.

× And jeez, uh, yes I do. I like uh, taking picture of different views, uh, especially the nature.

✓ And jeez, uh, yes I do. I like uh, taking pictures of different views, uh, especially nature.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the speaker means multiple photos (singular/plural issue). Also 'the nature' is unidiomatic in English; use 'nature' without the definite article. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items and omit 'the' before uncountable nouns like 'nature'.

× I like it both because I like the cities and also I like rural areas for or or do it too and landscapes.

✓ I like both because I like the cities and I also like rural areas and landscapes.

The original sentence has repetition and disfluent fragments ('for or or do it too') causing sentence structure errors. Remove repeated fillers and reorder conjunctions: 'I like both because I like the cities and I also like rural areas and landscapes.' Suggestion: eliminate filler words and ensure parallel structure when listing preferences.

× I prefer bills in other country, for example Switzerland and Switzerland has has beautiful landscapes and someday I would like to to travel to to Switzerland.

✓ I prefer views in other countries; for example, Switzerland has beautiful landscapes and someday I would like to travel to Switzerland.

Multiple errors: 'bills' is incorrect word choice (should be 'views'), and 'in other country' needs plural or an article: 'in other countries' (article/number agreement). There are repeated words 'has has' and 'to to' which are speech disfluencies. Also 'Switzerland' is a country name; say 'travel to Switzerland.' Suggestion: choose the correct noun, use plural for a general statement about other nations, remove duplicated words, and maintain proper preposition 'to' before country when indicating travel.