Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm, uh) and incorrect grammar (e.g., 'prefer to sit' → 'prefers to sit'; 'taking photo' → 'taking photos').

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because it lets me capture unique moments. For example, I enjoy photographing city skylines at sunset and mountain landscapes in the morning, which helps me remember the atmosphere and share it with others.

提案: Use correct grammar and specific details. Begin with a clear statement, then explain why with concrete examples and linking words. Replace vague phrases ('make me so insane') with precise feelings ('excited' or 'relaxed'), and fix tense errors.

例: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and full of natural beauty. For example, last month I visited the Aurora region and I was amazed by the wide-open fields and clear night sky, which made me feel relaxed and inspired.

提案: Answer directly and give a concise reason with a specific example. Avoid fillers and awkward phrasing ('I was insane with seeing'). Use correct pronouns and tense. Mention an example from your experience to support your opinion.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I love its culture and scenery. For instance, when I was young I often visited coastal towns with my family, and those colorful streets and traditional festivals left a strong impression on me.

× Definitely yes, I prefer taking photo in different views, umm, whereas my sister prefer to sit and see the views, uh, because I see that umm beautiful challenge that's everyone can trust it's in.

✓ Definitely yes, I prefer taking photos of different views, whereas my sister prefers to sit and look at the views because I see a beautiful challenge in them that everyone can appreciate.

Pronoun and related agreement issues: 'photo' should be plural 'photos' to match general action; use 'of' instead of 'in' to describe photographing views. 'my sister prefer' needs third-person singular 'prefers' (also subject-verb agreement, ID 27) so correction also addresses that. 'sit and see the views' is better expressed as 'sit and look at the views' (preposition 'at'). The clause 'that's everyone can trust it's in' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'that everyone can appreciate' for clarity. Suggestion: make subjects and verbs agree and use correct prepositions and clear relative clauses.

× In my opinion I prefer rural areas because it it have a special views that make me so insane with it's UMM.

✓ In my opinion I prefer rural areas because they have a special view that makes me so excited.

Subject-verb agreement and plurality: 'it it have' is incorrect; 'rural areas' is plural so use 'they have'. 'a special views' mixes singular and plural; use 'a special view' or 'special views'. 'make me so insane with' is unnatural and 'insane' is inappropriate; use 'makes me so excited'. Also remove filler words like 'UMM'. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects pair with plural verbs and choose appropriate adjectives.

× For example I want last month to Aurora areas and I was so enjoy enjoyable with the view.

✓ For example, I went to the Aurora area last month and I really enjoyed the view.

Tense and verb form errors: 'I want last month to' is wrong; intended past action requires past tense 'I went'. 'Aurora areas' is awkward; use 'Aurora area' or 'the Aurora region'. 'I was so enjoy enjoyable' mixes forms; use past simple 'I really enjoyed' or 'I was very pleased with'. Suggestion: use simple past for completed actions and use correct past-tense verbs and adjectives.

× Actually this is a hard question but I prefer for sure in my country because I love the culture in my country.

✓ Actually, this is a hard question, but I definitely prefer views in my country because I love my country's culture.

Awkward sentence structure and redundancy: 'I prefer for sure in my country' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'I definitely prefer views in my country.' Repeating 'in my country' twice is redundant; combine into 'my country's culture.' Suggestion: simplify and avoid repeating the same phrase.

× It's so beautiful and I when I was young I was insane with seeing my view country.

✓ It's so beautiful, and when I was young I loved seeing the places in my country.

Tense and word choice: 'I when I was young I was insane with seeing my view country' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. 'Was insane with' is inappropriate; use 'loved'. 'my view country' is meaningless; use 'places in my country' or 'my country’s scenery.' Keep past tense 'when I was young' and use a past-tense verb 'loved'. Suggestion: use clear vocabulary (love, enjoy) and correct noun phrases to express past feelings.