Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer clearer, more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition. For example, say you enjoy taking photos to remember trips and to share memories with friends and family. Use simple connectors like 'because' and 'so' to link ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember my trips and the special moments. Also, I like to share these pictures with my family and friends so they can see what I experienced.

提案: Give a clear preference with a concise reason and specific details. Begin with a topic sentence stating your preference, then add one or two specific supporting points using linking words like 'because' or 'because of'. Avoid filler words and repetition.

例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy peaceful, green landscapes and fresh air. For example, I like walking in the countryside and taking photos of fields and trees, which helps me relax.

提案: Be direct and structured: state your preference clearly, then give specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague phrases and hesitations. Use one or two sentences: a topic sentence plus a supporting detail with linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more connected to its landscapes and culture. For example, I enjoy the changing seasons at home — in winter the scenery is crisp and quiet, and in summer the parks are vibrant, which I appreciate more than views abroad.

× Yes, because journey after I will see uh, I will see this pictures uh and I will show my friend, my family like this.

✓ Yes, because later I will see these pictures and I will show them to my friends and family.

Errors: incorrect word order and use of 'journey after' instead of 'later'; 'this pictures' has singular demonstrative with plural noun and wrong article; missing object pronoun for 'show'. Grammar problem type: verb in the present participle is listed but actual errors include demonstrative/number and object pronoun and word order. Suggestion: Use 'later' for future reference, match demonstrative and noun number ('these pictures'), include object pronoun 'them', and place 'to my friends and family' after 'show'.

× I think there are two things honey, the urban area and rural area.

✓ I think there are two types: urban areas and rural areas.

Error: inconsistent singular/plural usage and missing article 'types' for counting. Use plural for both categories when speaking generally ('urban areas', 'rural areas'). Suggestion: Use 'types' or 'kinds' and plural nouns when referring to categories.

× But the more thing it's area Area because it's so nice.

✓ But I prefer rural areas because they are very nice.

Error: unclear and ungrammatical structure ('the more thing it's area Area'). The sentence needs a clear subject and verb and correct reference to 'areas' (plural) and agreement in the verb 'are'. Suggestion: State preference clearly (I prefer...) and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Green Yenny green area and also Yani, it's so nice.

✓ Green areas are very nice too.

Error: unclear words 'Yenny' and 'Yani' appear to be filler; 'it's' refers to plural 'areas' so should be 'they are'. Suggestion: Remove fillers and use clear plural pronoun 'they are' or restructure to 'Green areas are very nice.'

× I think it's very good for me.

✓ I think they are very good for me.

Error: pronoun 'it' incorrectly references plural 'areas'; use 'they' for plural subjects. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun number matches the noun it refers to.

× Because I love my country, but I will prefer my country any views my country, not another country.

✓ I love my country, and I prefer its views to those of other countries.

Errors: mixing of 'because' and 'but', incorrect modal 'will prefer' for a general preference, awkward phrase 'any views my country'. Use simple present 'prefer' for habitual or general preferences and concise comparison 'prefer X to Y'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer' and 'its views' and 'those of other countries'.

× Also, I'm a country.

✓ Also, I am from the countryside.

Error: 'I'm a country' is incorrect identity; the speaker likely means they are from the countryside or their country. Suggestion: Use 'I'm from the countryside' or 'I am from this country' depending on meaning.

× It's very, very nice.

✓ It is very, very nice.

Error: contraction and full form both acceptable; original is fine but keep consistent. Suggestion: No grammatical change required; keep as 'It is very, very nice.'

× Anyway, in Alliance city, uh, I think all things I have uh, from the any when winter or now any, I think it's.

✓ Anyway, in my city, I think things are good in winter and now as well.

Errors: unclear phraseology ('Alliance city' may be a place name but unclear), incorrect word order and filler words, missing verb in final clause. Suggestion: Use 'in my city' or correct city name, state 'I think things are good in winter and now' with proper verb 'are' and avoid filler words.