Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (keen interest, taking pictures), avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like capturing striking landscapes or interesting street scenes when I travel, because they help me remember the place. For example, I often post a favorite shot to my Instagram story to share the moment with friends.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then contrast the two with linking words and specific examples. Correct collocations (urban areas, rural areas, take photos) and avoid repetition. Limit to three sentences.

例: I like both urban and rural views for different reasons. In urban areas I enjoy photographing modern architecture and colorful sunsets, whereas in rural areas I prefer farms, village scenes and traditional crafts. Therefore I choose the setting depending on the kind of story I want to tell with my photos.

提案: Respond directly, correct grammar and phrasing (prefer taking photos, other countries), and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words (however, also) and give specific contrasts and one clear example. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: I like taking photos both at home and abroad. At home I often photograph historical monuments such as the Taj Mahal or Qutub Minar because of their cultural significance; however, when I travel I prefer to capture modern cityscapes, like tall skyscrapers and quiet streets, to show a different atmosphere.

× Yes, I have a keen interesting in taking picture of different views because when I go to any different place, any different kind of view, they are available.

✓ Yes, I have a keen interest in taking pictures of different views because when I go to different places, various views are available.

Errors: 'keen interesting' is incorrect collocation; correct noun is 'keen interest' (Singular and plural issue). 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' to match general activity. 'any different place, any different kind of view' is repetitive and awkward; better 'different places' and 'various views'. 'they are available' is vague; 'various views are available' is clearer. Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'keen interest', use plural nouns for general activities (pictures, places) and simplify redundant phrases. (Grammar problem type ID: 1)

× So I like to click them as our memory, as our memory and I also post them to my Instagram story as a static pic.

✓ So I like to take them as memories, and I also post them to my Instagram story as static pictures.

Errors: 'click' used informally but acceptable; however 'click them as our memory' is ungrammatical and repetitive. 'our memory' should be plural 'memories' and pronoun 'our' is odd since speaker refers to own photos; better 'my memories' or simply 'memories'. 'static pic' should be plural 'static pictures' to match posting multiple images. Suggestion: use 'take pictures' or 'take photos', use correct plural forms and consistent pronouns. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× I like both urban and rural areas because in urban area I can click pictures of some new buildings, some aesthetic sunset, while in rural rural area I can click pics of some farms, some village, traditional things which can be useful.

✓ I like both urban and rural areas because in urban areas I can take pictures of new buildings and aesthetic sunsets, while in rural areas I can take photos of farms, villages and traditional things.

Errors: inconsistent singular/plural: 'in urban area' should be 'in urban areas' or 'in the urban area'; 'some aesthetic sunset' should be plural 'aesthetic sunsets'; 'rural rural area' duplication and 'some village' should be plural 'villages'. 'click pics' is informal; use 'take pictures/photos'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches context, avoid duplicates and prefer consistent, neutral vocabulary. (Grammar problem type ID: 1)

× Well I prefer to take views in my country and as well as another country because in my country there are also some traditional and historical monuments like Taj Mahal, Qutub Minar and some another thing some another monuments and while in another country I can click photo there tall buildings and quiet Rd.

✓ Well, I prefer taking photos both in my country and in other countries because my country has traditional and historical monuments like the Taj Mahal and Qutub Minar, and in other countries I can photograph tall buildings and quiet roads.

Errors: awkward conjunctions and redundancy: 'prefer to take views in my country and as well as another country' should be 'prefer taking photos both in my country and in other countries'. 'some another thing some another monuments' is ungrammatical; replace with 'other monuments' or remove. Missing articles: 'the Taj Mahal' and 'Qutub Minar' are proper names but 'the' before Taj Mahal is common. 'click photo there tall buildings and quiet Rd' has multiple issues: 'click photo' -> 'photograph' or 'take photos of', missing preposition 'of', 'there tall buildings' -> 'tall buildings there' or 'tall buildings', 'quiet Rd' -> 'quiet roads' (plural). Suggestion: simplify sentence, use parallel structure, correct noun forms and add necessary articles and prepositions. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)