Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more natural and slightly more varied. Avoid listing too many items in a row without linking words. Add a brief reason or feeling to make the answer more engaging and specific.

例: Yes, I do. I love photographing landscapes and everyday life, such as flowers, green trees and children playing, because these scenes feel lively and genuine. For example, I enjoy capturing the sunlight on mountain slopes or people laughing on a beach, which adds emotion to the image.

提案: Good main idea, but the answer is slightly repetitive and contains short, choppy sentences. Combine ideas using linking words, explain what you mean by "life" with a specific detail or example, and avoid negative absolute statements about urban areas.

例: I prefer photographing rural areas because they often have more natural activity and character. For instance, you can capture farmers working in fields or children playing by a river, whereas urban scenes sometimes feel staged and crowded. Therefore, rural views usually give me more authentic moments to photograph.

提案: The idea is good but the answer has a grammar mistake and is slightly vague. Fix the sentence fragment, use a linking phrase to expand, and give a concrete example of a place or scene that feels authentic to you.

例: I generally prefer views in my own country because many places still feel untouched and people’s expressions seem genuine. For example, I love photographing local markets and coastal villages where the landscapes are natural and people smile freely, which makes the photos more meaningful.

× I love capturing many scenes like beautiful flowers, green trees and children playing.

✓ I love capturing many scenes, such as beautiful flowers, green trees, and children playing.

The original sentence is mostly correct, but adding a comma before 'and' and using 'such as' improves parallel listing. This addresses list clarity rather than a strict plural error; keep plural nouns 'flowers', 'trees', 'children' as they are.

× Mostly I capture mountains, beaches and nature.

✓ Mostly I capture mountains, beaches, and natural landscapes.

The phrase 'nature' as a noun is vague in this context; 'natural landscapes' is more idiomatic. Also add the serial comma for clarity. The verb 'capture' in present simple is correct for habitual action.

× Mostly I prefer capturing rural areas as it has life in it.

✓ Mostly I prefer capturing rural areas as they have life in them.

The pronoun 'it' does not agree with the plural noun 'rural areas'. Use the plural pronoun 'they' and 'them', and change verb 'has' to 'have' for subject-verb agreement.

× Urban areas are very artificial to see.

✓ Urban areas look very artificial.

The original phrase 'artificial to see' is awkward. Use a subject-verb-adjective structure 'look very artificial' to express appearance naturally.

× And very commercial life.

✓ They also have a very commercial atmosphere.

The fragment 'And very commercial life' is incomplete. Provide a subject and verb: 'They also have a very commercial atmosphere' clarifies meaning and makes a complete sentence.

× I feel pictures should have some life in it.

✓ I feel pictures should have some life in them.

The plural noun 'pictures' requires the plural pronoun 'them' instead of 'it'. This fixes the subject-pronoun agreement.

× I prefer views in my country because.

✓ I prefer views in my country because we have natural scenes that are not man-made and because people show sincere smiles.

The original ends with a dangling 'because' and is incomplete. Provide a full clause explaining why. Replace 'not built' with 'not man-made' and 'natural smiles from the heart' with 'sincere smiles' for idiomatic English and clearer meaning.