Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng hơn; tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi thì/ngôi; dùng tối đa 3–4 câu tự nhiên. Cụ thể: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó nêu lý do rõ ràng với chi tiết cụ thể, và kết bằng kết luận ngắn. Chú ý dùng động từ đúng (take pictures, make me feel relaxed) và loại bỏ mệnh đề thừa.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. It helps me relax after a long day of work because focusing on scenery calms my mind and lets me forget daily stress. For example, photographing a sunset at the park makes me feel peaceful and refreshed.

提案: Tránh mâu thuẫn và nói rõ ưu tiên; không lặp từ; dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Nên nói một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer... or I like both), rồi giải thích với ví dụ so sánh (differences like lights vs nature). Sửa ngữ pháp ("on the other hand" dùng để so sánh), và giới hạn 2–3 câu hỗ trợ.

例: I like both urban and rural views, but for different reasons. Urban scenes are exciting because of the lights and architecture, while rural views are peaceful with wide-open fields and fresh air. For instance, I enjoy city skylines at night but also love photographing quiet countryside at sunrise.

提案: Sửa cấu trúc mở đầu và cách liệt kê; dùng tên địa danh chính xác và tránh lỗi từ ("as far as I'm concerned"). Nên nói rõ ưu tiên hoặc trung lập, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể với ví dụ về điểm khác biệt (văn hóa, kiến trúc, thiên nhiên). Giữ câu ngắn gọn và logic.

例: As far as I'm concerned, I enjoy views both at home and abroad. My country has beautiful natural places like Ha Long Bay, while other countries offer iconic landmarks and different cultures to photograph. Therefore I like staying in the middle: nature at home and cultural variety abroad.

× Of course yes I do because taking a pictures of the different views make me feel enjoyable and relax more after they work for a long time.

✓ Of course I do, because taking pictures of different views makes me feel happy and more relaxed after I have been working for a long time.

The phrase 'taking a pictures' is incorrect: 'taking' should be followed by the plural noun 'pictures' (no article) so use 'taking pictures'. 'Make' must agree with the singular gerund subject 'taking pictures', so use 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). 'Enjoyable' is an adjective that doesn't fit; use 'happy' or 'enjoyment' with correct structure. 'Relax' should be the past participle or adjective form 'relaxed' to describe the speaker's state. 'After they work for a long time' is unclear and uses wrong pronoun; it should refer to the speaker 'after I have been working for a long time' using present perfect continuous to show duration.

× I know that it's there is no more benefits, but that's what makes me feel really comfortable and relaxed.

✓ I know that there are no more benefits, but that's what makes me feel really comfortable and relaxed.

The original contains redundant 'it's there is' and incorrect article/number: 'no more benefits' requires plural verb 'are'. Remove 'it's' and use 'there are no more benefits'. This fixes redundancy and subject-verb agreement. Also ensure plural 'benefits' matches 'are'.

× Umm from my perspective, I enjoy both of them because urban areas are rural areas.

✓ Umm, from my perspective, I enjoy both of them because urban areas and rural areas each have their own appeal.

The original sentence 'urban areas are rural areas' is logically incorrect and likely a wording error. Correct by clarifying both have appeal. Also add commas for clarity. This addresses sentence meaning and structure.

× In my opinion is is is the same.

✓ In my opinion, they are the same.

The original repeats 'is' and lacks a clear subject. Use 'they are the same' with the plural subject 'they' referring to the areas. Add a comma after the introductory phrase.

× They are all so beautiful and stunning in my eyes.

✓ They are all so beautiful and stunning to me.

'In my eyes' is understandable but 'to me' is more natural. No major grammar error but pronoun/idiom choice improved for naturalness.

× In the other hand, it's also make me feel comfortable.

✓ On the other hand, it also makes me feel comfortable.

Use the correct phrase 'on the other hand' not 'in the other hand'. 'It's also make' has wrong verb form; change to 'it also makes' for subject-verb agreement and correct tense.

× As far as I concerned, I enjoy both of them because in my country we have a lot of natural scenery like Halal Bay or Kachang, but in the other country we still have a lot of famous scenery too, so I think I'm in the middle.

✓ As far as I am concerned, I enjoy both because in my country we have a lot of natural scenery like Halal Bay or Kachang, and in other countries there are also many famous scenic spots, so I think I'm in the middle.

The phrase 'As far as I concerned' is missing the verb 'am'. 'Both of them' is acceptable but 'both' suffices. 'In the other country' should be 'in other countries' or 'in other countries there are also', and use 'there are' with plural 'scenic spots'. 'Famous scenery' is odd; 'famous scenic spots' or 'famous sights' is clearer. This corrects verb omission, number agreement, and phrasing.