Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use correct verb forms and concise supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and give a brief specific example of what you photograph and why.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I often photograph landscapes and city scenes to capture memories, and I try different angles to make each shot interesting. For example, when I visit a beach I take wide shots of the shoreline and close-ups of shells to show different perspectives.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then support it with concise reasons and specific examples. Remove fillers and hesitations, and use linking words (for example, because, so, also). Correct place names and descriptions for clarity.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because they offer a variety of scenes and architecture. For example, in Muscat you can see both modern buildings and nearby hills like Jebel Akhtar, which creates a calm and misty backdrop. This contrast makes city views more interesting to photograph.

提案: Answer directly and avoid confusing phrasing. State your preference clearly, then give a brief reason and a specific example. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I prefer my own country') and link ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the places well and they have a special meaning to me. For instance, Jabal Akhtar near Muscat is a calm, misty mountain with a peaceful atmosphere, and I enjoy photographing its landscape whenever I visit.

× My hobbies are took a photograph in it to create candid memories.

✓ My hobbies are taking photographs to create candid memories.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'took' after 'are'. The correct form is a gerund 'taking' to describe ongoing hobbies. Also 'a photograph in it' is awkward; use plural 'photographs' and omit 'in it'. Use 'to create' to show purpose.

× I'd like these hobbies very much.

✓ I like these hobbies very much.

Using 'I'd like' (I would like) suggests a conditional or polite request, not a statement of preference. The intended simple present is 'I like' to express habitual preference.

× If I visit any beautiful places, I took more photos in different angles.

✓ If I visit any beautiful places, I take more photos from different angles.

The conditional 'If I visit' is in present; the result clause should use present tense 'take', not past 'took'. Also use the preposition 'from' and plural 'angles' for correct idiom.

× In my opinion, prefer, prefer views are in urban areas, uh, residing, I believe in Muscat.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer urban views; I live in Muscat.

The original is disfluent and missing subjects/verbs. Insert subject 'I' and verb 'prefer', remove repeated words, and use 'I live in Muscat' for correct present-tense statement about residence.

× Uh, I think urban areas we visit, we get more views like Jebel Akhtar in Muscat that say calm and misty, please, we get in peaceful atmosphere.

✓ I think when we visit urban areas we see more views. For example, Jebel Akhtar in Muscat is calm and misty and has a peaceful atmosphere.

Original mixes clauses incorrectly and uses wrong verbs ('get more views'). Use 'when we visit' + 'we see' for present habitual action. Clarify example with 'is' for description and 'has a peaceful atmosphere'. Remove unnecessary words like 'please'.

× Honestly, I am saying that I didn't prefer using any other country.

✓ Honestly, I would not prefer going to another country.

The phrase 'I am saying that I didn't prefer using any other country' is incorrect: 'prefer' should be followed by an action or choice, not 'using any other country'. Use conditional 'would not prefer' or simple present 'do not prefer'. Also use 'going to another country' to express preference about travel.

× I I prefer my country itself.

✓ I prefer my own country.

Duplicate 'I' is an error; 'my country itself' is unnatural. Use 'my own country' in simple present to express current preference.

× There are very many beautiful places in my country.

✓ There are many beautiful places in my country.

'Very many' is nonstandard; use 'many' or 'very many' rarely. 'Many' suffices. Sentence uses correct existential 'There are'.

× For example, Jabal Akhtar that's situated in Muscat.

✓ For example, Jabal Akhtar, which is situated in Muscat.

Use 'which is' (or 'that is') with a relative clause; include commas for nonrestrictive clause if appropriate. 'that's' is informal; write 'which is' for clarity.

× It's a calm and misty place.

✓ It is a calm and misty place.

Contraction 'It's' is acceptable in speech but in formal correction expand to 'It is' to match register. The sentence is grammatically correct otherwise.

× It's surrounded by peaceful atmosphere.

✓ It is surrounded by a peaceful atmosphere.

'Surrounded by peaceful atmosphere' is missing an article. Use 'a peaceful atmosphere' to be grammatically correct.