Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, reduce redundancy, and make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., "like taking" not "to taking") and subject-verb agreement ("it gives"). Avoid vague phrases like "small gestures" unless explained.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially sunsets. For example, I often photograph the sky at dusk because the colours change quickly, which helps me practice timing and composition.

提案: Clarify your preference (urban or rural) and give specific reasons. Use correct prepositions and singular/plural forms ("prefer urban areas" not "prefer in urban areas"). Avoid contradictory statements in the same answer. Use linking words like "because" and "however" to connect ideas.

例: I prefer urban areas because city skylines and rooftops offer dramatic sunset views with colourful reflections on buildings. For instance, I like going to a rooftop café where I can photograph the skyline as the sun sets and the lights come on.

提案: Be more precise and natural: say "I prefer views in my own country" and explain why with specific examples. Correct phrasing ("best spots" not "sport"), avoid repetition, and combine short sentences into one or two coherent sentences using linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the best spots to watch the sunset. For example, there is a beach in my city that offers a beautiful horizon where my partner and I often go to relax and take photos.

× Yes, I like to taking pictures of different views like sunset views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, like sunsets.

After 'like' when expressing a general preference use the gerund (verb+ing) not the infinitive with 'to'. Also 'sunset views' is more naturally 'sunsets' and a comma improves clarity.

× It's give me a really great vibe when I have to click that picture and it's a great experience for me to learn new things with the small gestures of taking that picture.

✓ It gives me a really great feeling when I take a picture, and it is a great experience to learn new things through the small gestures of taking photos.

Subject 'it' requires the verb in third person singular ('gives' not 'give'). Use simple present 'take' for habitual actions. 'Vibe' is informal; 'feeling' fits better. 'Click that picture' is unnatural — use 'take a picture' or 'take photos'. Simplify and use plural 'photos' for generality.

× According to me, I prefer in urban areas because it's a very pleasant views when I watch to sunset views and it's give me a good vibe.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer urban areas because they are very pleasant when I watch sunsets, and they give me a good feeling.

'According to me' is nonstandard; use 'In my opinion'. 'Prefer' does not need 'in' before the noun. 'Views' plural must match verb agreement. 'Watch to sunset views' is incorrect; use 'watch sunsets'. 'It's give' should be 'they give' to agree with plural noun 'areas' or 'sunsets'.

× Also I learned new things with the temperatures all all things of the vibrance.

✓ Also I learn new things about the temperature and other aspects of the vibrancy.

Context refers to general regular learning, so use present simple 'learn' not past 'learned'. 'Temperatures' should be singular 'temperature' or 'the temperature' depending on meaning; simplify to 'temperature'. Remove duplicated 'all all' and rephrase 'things of the vibrance' to 'aspects of the vibrancy'.

× So it's for me is rural.

✓ For me, rural areas are better.

The original is ungrammatical and redundant. Reorder to a clear subject-verb structure: 'For me, rural areas are better' or 'I prefer rural areas' depending on intended meaning.

× I prefer in my country because I know where I have to go for best views.

✓ I prefer my country because I know where to go for the best views.

'Prefer' does not take 'in' before the noun here. Use 'where to go' instead of 'where I have to go' for natural phrasing. Add the definite article 'the' before 'best views'.

× Like in my city is a sport of sunset.

✓ In my city there is a spot for watching the sunset.

Original lacks proper subject-verb order and uses 'sport' incorrectly; 'spot' (a place) is correct. Use 'there is' to state existence and 'for watching the sunset' to explain purpose.

× It's a great sunset sport.

✓ It is a great spot to watch the sunset.

'Sunset sport' is incorrect word choice; use 'spot' and an infinitive phrase 'to watch the sunset' to describe its purpose.

× I enjoy my time with my boyfriend that side.

✓ I enjoy my time there with my boyfriend.

'That side' is awkward; use 'there' to refer to that place. Place the prepositional phrase 'with my boyfriend' after 'there' for natural word order.

× So for us it's a great side for views wise.

✓ So for us, it is a great place for views.

'Side' and 'views wise' are ungrammatical and informal. Use 'place' and remove 'wise'. Add a comma after introductory phrase 'For us'.