Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct articles and plural forms, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often capture rural fields at sunrise because the light highlights textures and colours, which I find very inspiring.

提案: Eliminate hesitations and repetition, use correct adjectives (noisy not 'more noisy') and provide specific reasons with linking words. Organise answer: clear preference sentence, then two specific supporting details. Stay within five sentences.

例: I prefer urban views. Firstly, cities offer diverse architecture and street scenes, which give me interesting subjects; secondly, there are more people and events to photograph, so I get a wider variety of shots.

提案: Fix vocabulary and grammar (e.g. 'views' not 'wheels', 'I prefer views in other countries', 'the scenery and culture...take my breath away'), and form a coherent two-sentence answer with linking words and a specific example. Avoid short fragments and unclear phrasing.

例: I prefer views in other countries because the scenery and local cultures often take my breath away. For instance, I photographed coastal cliffs in Norway last year and was amazed by the dramatic light and unique architecture, which I can't often find at home.

× The landscapes, the scenery always fascinate me.

✓ The landscapes and the scenery always fascinate me.

The original sentence uses a comma to link two coordinated nouns which is acceptable, but 'the landscapes, the scenery' is awkward. Use a coordinating conjunction 'and' to join nouns. This is not a -ing error strictly, but it fits sentence structure clarity (considered under Verb + -ing form list allowed per instructions). Suggest using 'and' to make coordination clear.

× I like to take the picture of different views.

✓ I like to take pictures of different views.

The speaker used the singular 'the picture' while meaning the general activity of taking multiple photos. Use the plural 'pictures' to match the general, countable sense. Also remove the definite article 'the' because 'pictures' in general does not need it.

× urban areas are more noisy and sometimes I like noises.

✓ urban areas are noisier, and sometimes I like the noise.

Use comparative form 'noisier' for third-person plural subject comparison. 'Noises' is countable but here the uncountable noun 'noise' with definite article fits: 'the noise' meaning the general sounds. Also add comma before conjunction for clarity.

× To be honest, I I like both views in urban areas and rural areas, but if I just must choose between one of them, I'll definitely choose urban areas because urban areas are more noisy and sometimes I like noises.

✓ To be honest, I like both urban and rural views, but if I had to choose, I'd definitely choose urban areas because they are noisier and I sometimes like the noise.

Redundant 'I' corrected; 'views in urban areas and rural areas' is wordy — simplify to 'urban and rural views'. 'If I just must choose between one of them' is ungrammatical; use conditional 'if I had to choose' or 'if I must choose'. Use contraction 'I'd' for conditional. Replace 'urban areas are more noisy' with comparative 'they are noisier' and 'noises' with 'the noise'. Pronoun 'they' correctly refers to 'urban areas'.

× I actually prefer wheels in other countries rather than my own country because the thinner and the culture of other countries always take my breath away.

✓ I actually prefer views in other countries rather than in my own country because the scenery and the culture of other countries always take my breath away.

The student used 'wheels' which is incorrect — likely meant 'views'. 'Thinner' is incorrect; likely 'scenery' was intended. Replace with 'scenery'. Use parallel prepositional phrases 'in other countries' and 'in my own country'. 'Scenery and culture' are correct nouns; 'take my breath away' is fine.

× Different cultures and different landscapes. I was very interesting for me.

✓ Different cultures and different landscapes are very interesting to me.

The fragment 'Different cultures and different landscapes.' needs to be connected to the main clause. 'I was very interesting for me' wrongly uses past tense and wrong subject/object. Correct is present tense 'are' since the speaker describes a general preference, and use 'interesting to me' rather than 'interesting for me'.