Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、句子更简洁，并使用连词连接信息。尽量避免重复（如“like”多次出现）和语法错误，注意名词复数和时态。可以先给出直接肯定的主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持，如拍摄的对象、角度和目的。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I like to record memorable moments. For special scenes I often shoot from different angles and sometimes include people in the frame so I can remember the atmosphere later.

提案: 回答需要更清晰和自然，避免含糊或自相矛盾的表达（例如“不 like real world things”）。使用明确原因并举例说明，如喜欢城市的建筑、人群或夜景；用连词（because, for example）使逻辑顺畅。注意句子简洁，不超过五句。

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy of cities and the variety of architecture. For example, I like walking along busy streets and photographing crowded markets or tall buildings at night.

提案: 表达应更礼貌且逻辑清楚，避免口语填充词和重复（like, I mean）。先直接回答，然后给出理由并举例说明区别，例如外国景色的新颖性或本国的熟悉感。注意语法（country单数/复数、冠词）和句子连贯性。

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different cultures and architectures that feel new to me. However, I also love my country for its familiar landscapes, although some old buildings are becoming too common for my taste.

× Yes, it's like. I like to record everything happens to me and if these things and this view is really special, I will take more picture like different angles or taking pictures with someone to recall it.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to record everything that happens to me, and if something or a view is really special, I will take more pictures from different angles or take pictures with someone to remember it.

句子存在多个问题，其中主要为形容词/副词用法和句子结构不当： 1) “it's like” 用法不准确，面试回答中更自然用“Yes, I do.”； 2) “everything happens to me” 缺少关系代词，应为“everything that happens to me”； 3) “these things and this view” 表达冗长且不自然，改为“something or a view” 更清晰； 4) “take more picture like different angles” 中“picture”应为复数“pictures”，“like”用法错误，应为“from different angles”； 5) “or taking pictures with someone to recall it” 中动名词与前半句并列不一致，改为并列不定式“or take pictures with someone to remember it”。 建议：使用关系代词连接从句，复数名词与并列结构保持一致，避免口语模糊词“like”，把“recall”替换为更自然的“remember”。

× I like to record everything happens to me and if these things and this view is really special, I will take more picture like different angles or taking pictures with someone to recall it.

✓ I like to record everything that happens to me, and if something or a view is really special, I will take more pictures from different angles or take pictures with someone to remember it.

原句中主谓一致问题体现在“everything happens to me”缺少连接词使句子读起来不顺，应为“everything that happens to me”。另外“take more picture”中名词与动词不一致，应为复数“pictures”。 建议：注意在含有“everything”等不定代词的从句中使用正确的连接结构，并确保可数名词在需要时使用复数形式。

× I will take more picture like different angles or taking pictures with someone to recall it.

✓ I will take more pictures from different angles or take pictures with someone to remember it.

问题在于可数名词单复数使用错误：应使用复数“pictures”来表示多张照片；同时“like different angles”中“like”误用，改为“from different angles”。 建议：当表示多张照片时使用复数，并用正确介词表达拍摄角度。

× Definitely, I prefer urban areas and it's just because I I don't like real world things. I'm more like urban. I like people and the Street View.

✓ Definitely, I prefer urban areas because I don't like rural life. I'm more into urban settings. I like people and the street views.

原句时态和用词有问题： 1) “it's just because I I don't like real world things” 表达混乱且重复“I”，应删去多余的“I”，并用更准确的名词“rural life（乡村生活）”； 2) “I'm more like urban” 语法不正确，需用短语“I'm more into urban settings”或“I prefer urban areas”来表达偏好； 3) “the Street View” 大写和定冠词使用不当，改为复数小写“street views”。 建议：用准确的名词表达对比（urban vs rural），保持人称和时态一致，避免重复单词。

× OK is another countries, but I don't mean to like say some bad words to my country. I love my country exactly and but like something or old house in my country is too much.

✓ OK, in other countries, but I don't mean to say anything bad about my country. I love my country, but some things, like old houses there, are too much.

代词和指代不清问题： 1) “OK is another countries” 主语和指代错误，应为“in other countries”； 2) “I don't mean to like say some bad words to my country” 中“like”多余，且“say some bad words to my country”说法不自然，改为“say anything bad about my country”； 3) “I love my country exactly and but like something or old house in my country is too much” 结构混乱，指代不清。“something or old house”应明确为“some things, like old houses there”，且动词需与主语一致（are）。 建议：使用明确的指代（in other countries / about my country），避免口语填充词“like”，整理句子结构，确保主语和动词一致。