Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول أن تبدأ بجملة موضوعية واضحة وتستخدم زمنًا وأزمنة صحيحة مع تجنب التكرار. احرص على ربط الجمل ببعضها باستخدام أدوات ربط بسيطة ووضح السبب والنتيجة بتفصيل مختصر. كما ينبغي تصحيح الأخطاء النحوية مثل ترتيب الكلمات واستخدام الحروف وحالات الزمن.

例: I love taking photos of beautiful views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I visit a seaside town, I take pictures of the sunset so I can look back at them later. This helps me feel as if I am there again and share the experience with my friends.

提案: ابدأ بجملة واضحة توضح تفضيلك ثم قدم سببًا محددًا مدعومًا بتفاصيل قصيرة. صحح الأخطاء في تركيب الجملة والضمائر واجعل الجمل متصلة باستخدام أدوات ربط مثل "because" أو "so" أو "therefore".

例: I prefer photographing urban views because they offer unique scenes I don't see every day. For instance, I enjoy capturing city skylines and street markets, and later I show these photos to my family to share the experience.

提案: قدم إجابة مباشرة ثم اذكر سببين محددين مع ربطهم بكلمات ربط واضحة. تجنب التكرار واستخدم عبارات موجزة بدلاً من تكرار أفكار مشابهة. حسّن استخدام الأزمنة وصياغة الجمل لتكون أكثر سلاسة.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new and exciting sights. For example, visiting a historic city abroad lets me photograph architectures I have never seen before, which makes travelling more enjoyable and memorable.

× I'm crazy about taking pictures to all views I seen because I feel the view is very beautiful thing I want to see again.

✓ I'm crazy about taking pictures of all the views I have seen because I feel the view is a very beautiful thing I want to see again.

The student used 'seen' without an auxiliary verb; the present perfect 'have seen' is required to indicate experiences up to now. Also use 'of' (preposition) with 'pictures of' and include the article 'a' before 'very beautiful thing'. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences ('I have seen'), use 'pictures of', and include articles where needed.

× So I prefer to take a picture to save this moment to see it again when I need to see.

✓ So I prefer to take a picture to save this moment and see it again when I want to.

The student used 'to' incorrectly with 'take a picture to save' and repeated 'to see' awkwardly. Use 'to save this moment' (infinitive) and connect ideas with 'and'. Also replace 'when I need to see' with the more natural 'when I want to.' Suggestion: join clauses with 'and' and use natural collocations ('take a picture to save a moment').

× I think I prefer taking photo in urban areas because it's not the views that I can see all the time, so I prefer to capture this moment to look back to it with my friends and family.

✓ I think I prefer taking photos in urban areas because they are not views that I can see all the time, so I prefer to capture the moment to look back on it with my friends and family.

Use plural 'photos' for general meaning. Use 'in' for places is fine. Replace 'it's not the views' with 'they are not views' to agree in number and meaning. Use the preposition 'on' with 'look back on' not 'look back to'. Also use 'the moment' for a specific captured moment. Suggestion: match plural/singular, use correct phrasal verbs ('look back on'), and pluralize 'photo' when general.

× I think I prefer views in other countries because of many reasons.

✓ I think I prefer views in other countries for many reasons.

Use the preposition 'for' with 'many reasons' rather than 'because of'. 'Because of' typically precedes a noun phrase denoting a cause, but 'for many reasons' is the more natural collocation here. Suggestion: use 'for many reasons' or 'because' + clause.

× The 1st that in a new country I will see something I haven't seen before so I could enjoy it and I could be excited to see this view and because it will be entertainment.

✓ First, in a new country I will see things I haven't seen before, so I can enjoy them and be excited to see those views because they are entertaining.

The original mixes tenses and modal verbs incorrectly. Use 'First,' as an introductory adverb. 'Will see' for future visits is fine, but use plural 'things' and 'haven't seen before' (present perfect) to express prior experience. Replace 'could' with 'can' for general ability/possibility and match plurals ('them', 'those views'). Use 'entertaining' (adjective) instead of 'will be entertainment'. Suggestion: keep tense consistency (use future for future events, present perfect for past experience) and choose appropriate modals ('can' for general ability) and correct noun/adjective forms.