Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatically accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms, articles, and word order. Avoid unrelated fragments (e.g., "I dinner in Riverside").

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, on sunny days I often photograph the blue sky and interesting cloud formations, and I also like capturing riverside scenes when I have dinner there because the lights reflect nicely on the water.

提案: Answer directly and use clear reasons with specific details. Use correct articles and plural forms, and linking words like 'because' to connect ideas. Mention concrete features (e.g., trees, mountains, fresh air) and avoid unclear words/phrases.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are surrounded by trees and mountains, and the air feels fresher there. For instance, I love the peaceful scenery of my hometown, where you can see green fields and a clear river that make the landscape very attractive.

提案: Give a direct opinion and explain with specific conditions. Avoid filler words (uh) and unclear phrases. Use linking words ('it depends', 'however', 'for example') to structure your response, and provide one or two concrete reasons for each preference.

例: It depends on the situation: I like views in my own country because they are familiar and meaningful to me, but I also enjoy views abroad because they offer new architecture and landscapes. For example, at home I appreciate traditional countryside scenes, whereas when I travel to another country I enjoy exploring modern city skylines or unusual natural formations.

× Yes I do, for example in sunny day I usually taking picture blue sky and cloudy.

✓ Yes I do. For example, on sunny days I usually take pictures of the blue sky and clouds.

Errors: incorrect preposition and article usage ('in sunny day' should be 'on sunny days'), wrong verb form ('taking' should be base form 'take' after 'usually'), singular/plural nouns ('picture' -> 'pictures', 'cloudy' -> 'clouds'), missing articles and preposition ('picture blue sky' -> 'pictures of the blue sky'). Suggestion: use 'on' with days, make nouns plural for habitual actions, and use base verb after adverbs of frequency like 'usually'. Use 'of' to link 'pictures' and what they show.

× However sometime I dinner in Riverside I.

✓ However, sometimes I have dinner at Riverside.

Errors: word order and wrong verb usage. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency), 'I dinner' is incorrect because 'dinner' is a noun so use 'have dinner'. Preposition 'in Riverside' should be 'at Riverside' for a location reference; final 'I' is misplaced. Suggestion: place adverbs properly, use correct verb collocations (have dinner), and use 'at' for specific places.

× I prefer Will in rural area because it's surrounded by tree and mountain.

✓ I prefer Will in the rural area because it's surrounded by trees and mountains.

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'rural area', plural nouns 'tree' and 'mountain' should be 'trees' and 'mountains'. 'Will' seems to be a name but keep it as given. Suggestion: use 'the' for a specific area, pluralize countable nouns when referring to more than one, and ensure subject reference is clear.

× The east fish and scenery it beautiful.

✓ The fresh air and scenery are beautiful.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical: 'The east fish' is likely incorrect word choice; probably intended 'fresh air'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'scenery' (singular) with 'it' is awkward when combined; better to use 'are' with two items or rephrase. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary ('fresh air'), coordinate nouns correctly, and ensure verb agrees with compound subjects.

× Yes I really love Lulu area view.

✓ Yes, I really love the view of Lulu area.

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'view' and incorrect noun order; better phrasing is 'the view of Lulu area' or 'Lulu area's view'. Suggestion: use possessive or 'of' structure and include articles where needed.

× Uh, I prefer board bill, uh, is different is depend on situation.

✓ Uh, I prefer abroad travel; it depends on the situation.

Original is unintelligible: 'board bill' likely intended 'abroad' or 'boarding abroad'. 'is different is depend on situation' should be 'it depends on the situation.' Suggestion: use clear vocabulary ('abroad'), use pronoun 'it' as subject for the clause, and use correct verb 'depends'.

× Uh, sometime I travel abroad, I usually lie or another country, but in my country.

✓ Sometimes when I travel abroad, I usually like other countries, but I prefer my own country.

Multiple errors: 'sometime' -> 'sometimes'; comma splice and unclear clause 'I usually lie or another country' likely meant 'I usually like other countries'; 'but in my country' is fragment; combine into a complete sentence. Suggestion: correct adverb, use 'like' instead of 'lie', complete the contrast with 'but I prefer my own country', and ensure clauses are connected properly.