Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler sounds, use correct tense and plural forms, and add one specific supporting detail. For example, say why you enjoy it and give a short example of what you photograph.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because I love nature. For example, I often take photos of mountain landscapes and rivers when I go hiking, which helps me remember the trip and practice my composition skills.

提案: Give a direct preference or say you like both but explain briefly. Use correct singular/plural forms and a linking phrase to compare. Add a specific example of what you like in each type of view.

例: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers something different. For instance, I enjoy city skylines and street scenes for their energy, while I photograph rural fields and forests for their calm and natural light.

提案: Organize your answer and be specific. Start with a clear statement, then give 2–3 named examples with brief descriptions. Avoid trailing off and incomplete phrases. Use correct articles and prepositions (e.g., "in my country," "in other countries").

例: I like views both in my country and abroad, but for different reasons. In my country I enjoy places like Kashmir and Uttarakhand for their mountains and lakes, while abroad I appreciate historic cities and coastal scenery because they offer new architecture and cultural differences.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different view because I like nature and I captured, uh, beautiful views in my cameras.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I like nature and I capture beautiful views with my camera.

The noun 'view' should be plural as 'views' to match 'pictures of different'; 'captured' (past) conflicts with general preference, so present simple 'capture' fits; 'in my cameras' is awkward—use singular 'camera' or 'with my camera'. Use 'with' to indicate the instrument. Suggestion: keep consistent present-tense statements for habits and use plural nouns to match 'different'.

× So I definitely, definitely taking a picture of different view.

✓ So I definitely, definitely take pictures of different views.

The original lacks the auxiliary verb needed for the present continuous ('am taking') but the intended meaning is habitual action, so present simple 'take' is appropriate. Also change 'a picture of different view' to plural 'pictures of different views' for natural collocation. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'I take'.

× Actually, I prefer both urban area and rural areas, so I definitely capture both views in my cameras and my memories.

✓ Actually, I prefer both urban and rural areas, so I definitely capture both kinds of views with my camera and in my memories.

Use parallel plural forms: 'urban and rural areas' or 'urban area' -> 'urban areas'. 'Both' should modify plural nouns. 'In my cameras' is nonstandard; use 'with my camera'. Clarify 'my memories' as 'in my memories' to indicate stored mentally. Maintain present simple 'capture' for habitual action.

× Yeah, actually my country and other country are different.

✓ Yeah, actually my country and other countries are different.

When comparing 'my country' to others, use plural 'other countries' to indicate more than one. This matches natural comparison structure.

× So some place in my country are very beautiful like a Kashmir and Uttarakhand and other states like Rajasthan and Bihar, Patna this is and other country views are maybe.

✓ So some places in my country are very beautiful, like Kashmir and Uttarakhand, and other states such as Rajasthan and Bihar (for example, Patna). Views in other countries can be beautiful too.

Multiple issues: 'some place' should be plural 'some places' and must agree with plural verb 'are'; 'a Kashmir' is incorrect—use 'Kashmir' without an article; list states with correct punctuation and connectors ('such as'); clarify 'Patna this is' to 'for example, Patna' or remove if unnecessary. The final fragment 'and other country views are maybe' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'Views in other countries can be beautiful too.' Suggestions: use plural nouns, remove unnecessary articles before place names, and complete sentence structure for clarity.