Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid grammar errors (e.g., 'knows' → 'know'), and limit to maximum 4–5 sentences. Add a brief specific detail about what kinds of views or moments you capture and use a linking word when adding that detail.

例: Yes, I love taking pictures. People often call me the 'camera girl' because I regularly photograph friends and scenery. For example, I enjoy capturing sunrise cityscapes and candid portraits of people, which makes me feel creative and like an artist.

提案: Give a direct, coherent answer and avoid contradictions. If you prefer urban views, explain why with specific examples and linking words (e.g., 'because', 'however'). Fix repetition and incomplete phrases. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the mix of architecture and small green spaces in cities. For example, I like photographing tree-lined streets and rooftop gardens. However, I also appreciate rural landscapes for their peacefulness and wide-open skies, so I sometimes photograph both.

提案: Avoid political complaints and emotional generalizations in a short speaking test answer. Give a concise, neutral reason for your preference and support it with a specific, non-controversial detail. Use one or two sentences maximum to stay focused and natural.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different cultures and architectural styles. For instance, I love photographing old European streets and colorful markets abroad, which feel different from the familiar scenery at home.

× Many people knows me as the camera girl 'cause I always take pictures of them.

✓ Many people know me as the camera girl 'cause I always take pictures of them.

The subject 'Many people' is plural, so the verb must be the base form 'know' rather than the singular 'knows'. To improve, identify the subject number (singular/plural) and choose the matching verb form: plural subjects take base verbs without -s in the present simple.

× Not only the views but also the people.

✓ Not only the views but also the people are included.

The original fragment lacks a verb and is a sentence without a verb; it also needs to fit the surrounding context. Adding 'are included' completes the sentence and agrees in number with the compound subject. To improve, ensure each sentence has a main verb and that compound subjects take a plural verb.

× However I also like city views or rural views because the the views there are super engaging cause.

✓ However, I also like city views or rural views because the views there are super engaging.

Problems: missing comma after introductory 'However', duplicated 'the the', and incorrect colloquial ending 'cause' used as a sentence-final filler. Correcting removes duplication, adds punctuation, and replaces 'cause' with nothing; 'because' already introduces the reason. To improve, proofread for repeated words, add commas after introductory words, and avoid casual fillers in formal responses.

× Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?

✓ Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?

This sentence is already correct and matches plural/singular usage: 'your own country' (singular) versus 'other countries' (plural). No change needed. Keep subject and noun number consistent.

× Of course I would prefer other country views though.

✓ Of course I would prefer views of other countries, though.

The phrase 'other country views' is unnatural and lacks correct plural and preposition use. 'Views of other countries' uses the plural 'countries' to match 'other' and the preposition 'of' to link 'views' to 'countries'. To improve, use natural noun phrases with correct plural forms and prepositions.

× They say that love your own country, but how can I love my own country when the government itself is not very accommodating or sufficient to us?

✓ They say that you should love your own country, but how can I love mine when the government is not very accommodating or sufficient to us?

Issues corrected: missing subject 'you' after 'say that', replaced 'my own country' with the pronoun 'mine' to avoid repetition, removed reflexive 'itself' which is unnecessary here, and kept 'to us' though 'toward us' or 'for us' might be better. To improve, include explicit subjects after verbs like 'say that', use appropriate pronouns to avoid repetition, and avoid unnecessary reflexive pronouns.