Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words. Correct verb forms and articles (e.g., 'the mountains or the fields'), and reduce repetition ('I like' used multiple times). Add one specific detail to illustrate why you enjoy those views.

例: Yes, I enjoy photography, especially landscapes. For example, I love photographing beaches at sunset because the warm light and reflections create dramatic colors, which I later use as backgrounds in my projects.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and correct grammar and vocabulary ('rural areas' without 'the' is fine, and avoid unclear phrases like 'building sun'). Explain reasons with linking words and a specific example to support your preference. Use consistent tense and capitalize only as needed.

例: I prefer rural views because they offer open spaces and natural scenery. For instance, walking through a countryside path surrounded by green fields and blue skies helps me relax and gives me better photo opportunities than crowded city streets.

提案: Use correct verb forms and a clearer structure: state your preference first, then give reasons and a brief example. Replace informal 'I've only went' with 'I've only been to'. Mention a specific country or type of view you'd like to visit to be more concrete.

例: I generally prefer the views in my own country because I'm familiar with them, but I'm also keen to visit abroad to compare landscapes. For example, I would love to photograph the fjords in Norway to see if they match the dramatic images I've seen online.

× I like taking pictures of the landscapes, especially the beaches, capturing the sunset or views of the mountains of the field.

✓ I like taking pictures of landscapes, especially beaches, capturing the sunset or views of mountains and fields.

Article errors (ID 22): 'the landscapes' and 'the beaches' are unnecessary with general plural nouns; use plural without 'the' to talk generally. 'Mountains of the field' is ungrammatical; use 'mountains and fields' to list general scenery. Also remove extra 'the' where not specific.

× It's basically I love the view of the nature and I want to capture it and treasure it.

✓ Basically, I love the views of nature, and I want to capture them and treasure them.

Sentence structure error (ID 26) and article error (ID 22): The original mixes clauses awkwardly ('It's basically I love...'). Use a clearer structure 'Basically, I love...' Also use plural 'views' and 'them' to agree with plural 'views'; 'nature' is uncountable so use without 'the'.

× I prefer views in the rural areas because it doesn't have much building sun to it.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because there aren't many buildings or signs of development.

Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11) and sentence structure (ID 26): 'in the rural areas' can be 'in rural areas' for general preference. The phrase 'building sun to it' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'many buildings' or 'much building'—use 'there aren't many buildings' and rephrase to 'signs of development' for clarity.

× I like the raw nature view.

✓ I like the raw natural view.

Incorrect use of adjectives (ID 13): 'raw nature' is awkward; use 'raw natural' or better 'untouched natural' or 'raw natural scenery'. Adjectives should modify nouns correctly: 'natural view' or 'natural scenery'.

× I love to see greens and Blues, it makes me calm.

✓ I love to see green and blue; it makes me feel calm.

This involves word choice and capitalization (ID 13): 'greens and Blues' should be 'green and blue' (colors uncapitalized). Use 'feel calm' rather than just 'calm' for natural English. Also replace comma splice with a semicolon or split sentences.

× Well, I've only went to few places in our country and I love the view here, but I also want to go to other countries to see and capture the views that I've seen online.

✓ Well, I've only been to a few places in our country, and I love the views here, but I also want to go to other countries to see and capture the views I've seen online.

Past tense issue (ID 5) and article/quantifier errors (ID 22/14): 'I've only went' is incorrect; after 'have' use past participle 'been' not 'went'. Use 'a few' rather than 'few' when implying some. 'The view' -> 'the views' for consistency. 'that' before 'I've seen' is optional; removed for conciseness.