Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or a short example. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'when I go to other areas', 'my hobby is taking pictures'). Aim for 2–3 sentences and include linking words such as 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography is my hobby. For example, when I travel I often photograph mountains and lakes to capture their colors and shapes.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'I prefer rural areas because I like nature, green fields and open land'). Mention one concrete example or reason why rural views appeal to you.

例: I prefer rural areas because I love natural scenery such as green fields and open land. For instance, I enjoy photographing wide landscapes and quiet villages that offer peaceful compositions.

提案: Be direct and grammatical. State your preference clearly, then give one specific reason and an example. Avoid vague phrases like 'it's look very beautiful and interesting means'. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas. Keep answers within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because our northern regions have stunning mountains and lakes. For example, I often visit a nearby northern lake to photograph misty mornings and rocky shores.

× whenever I go to another areas I take a lot of pictures of different views, mountains, lakes, etcetera because it's my hobby to taking pictures and I love to take the pictures.

✓ whenever I go to other areas I take a lot of pictures of different views, mountains, lakes, etcetera because it's my hobby to take pictures and I love to take pictures.

Use 'other areas' not 'another areas' because 'another' requires singular countable nouns; use 'other' for plural. Change 'to taking' to 'to take' because after 'hobby' with 'to' the base verb form 'to take' is correct. Remove redundant 'the' before 'pictures' when speaking generally. Suggestion: practice countable/plural forms and verb patterns after nouns like 'hobby'.

× it's my hobby to taking pictures and I love to take the pictures.

✓ it's my hobby to take pictures and I love to take pictures.

After the noun 'hobby' the infinitive 'to take' is used; 'to taking' is incorrect. Also 'the pictures' is unnecessary when referring to pictures in general. Suggestion: use the infinitive after 'hobby' and avoid unnecessary definite article for general references.

× Because it's my hobby to take the pictures of natural lands instead of taking pictures of urban areas, so that I prefer rural areas to live and for taking pictures.

✓ It's my hobby to take pictures of natural landscapes rather than urban areas, so I prefer to live in rural areas and take pictures there.

Sentence contained redundant connectors ('Because' + 'so that') causing structure problems. 'natural lands' is unnatural; use 'natural landscapes'. Use parallel structure 'prefer to live in... and take pictures there'. Suggestion: avoid combining 'because' and 'so' together and use parallel verb forms.

× I prefer rural areas to live and for taking pictures.

✓ I prefer to live in rural areas and to take pictures there.

Use correct preposition 'in' after 'live' and keep parallel infinitive forms 'to live' and 'to take'. 'for taking pictures' is awkward; use 'to take pictures' or 'to take pictures there'. Suggestion: maintain preposition use with verbs of place and keep parallel structure.

× Obviously I would love prefer views in my country because there are much beautiful northern areas, mountains, lakes, so that I prefer my country views of northern side areas.

✓ Obviously I would prefer views in my country because there are many beautiful northern areas, mountains, and lakes, so I prefer the northern views of my country.

'would love prefer' is incorrect; choose one modal phrase, e.g. 'would prefer' or 'would love'. 'there are much beautiful' should be 'there are many beautiful' because 'many' modifies countable nouns. 'northern side areas' is awkward; 'the northern views' is clearer. Suggestion: choose correct modal phrasing, use 'many' with countable nouns, and use natural noun phrases for regions.

× It's look very beautiful and interesting means it can beautiful all over the world.

✓ They look very beautiful and interesting; I think they could be beautiful anywhere in the world.

'It's look' is ungrammatical; use 'They look' to refer to plural 'areas' or 'views'. 'it can beautiful' is incorrect word order and missing verb; use 'could be beautiful'. Suggestion: ensure subject agrees with verb and include appropriate auxiliary verbs when using adjectives.

× I think I mostly prefer rural areas because I like to see the nature and the green fields and the open land.

✓ I think I mostly prefer rural areas because I like to see nature, green fields, and open land.

'the nature' is usually uncountable and used without 'the' in general statements: use 'nature'. Also parallel list punctuation improves clarity. Suggestion: omit 'the' before uncountable nouns when speaking generally and keep list items parallel.