Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and natural: avoid hesitations (e.g., "uh") and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say when and why you take sunset photos and what you do with them later.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially sunsets. For example, I often photograph the sunset at the beach because the colors are vivid, and I save my best shots in a gallery to look back on or share with friends.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar: give a direct preference sentence then support with a specific reason and linking word. Avoid vague phrases like "dependent on the view of the area" and fix subject-verb order.

例: I prefer rural views because they usually have more greenery and peaceful scenery. For instance, I enjoy places with trees and open fields since they feel relaxing and photograph well.

提案: Make the response more concise and natural: state your preference first, then give a specific reason with correct grammar and a linking word. Mention a concrete example or timing to sound more detailed.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the best spots and the right time to visit. For example, I know a hilltop where the sunrise looks spectacular in spring, so I go there early to take photos.

× Yes, I like taking picture of, uh, different views, especially the views with the sunset.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially views with the sunset.

The noun 'picture' should be plural ('pictures') because 'taking pictures of different views' implies multiple images. Also remove the extra comma and article before 'different views' for fluency. Suggestion: use 'pictures' whenever referring to multiple photos and avoid unnecessary fillers and commas.

× It's very beautiful and I keep it in my gallery to watch it later.

✓ They are very beautiful and I keep them in my gallery to look at later.

Pronoun and verb form issues: 'It' refers to 'pictures' (plural), so use 'they' and plural verb 'are'. Use 'them' as the object pronoun. 'Watch it later' is unidiomatic for photos; use 'look at later'. Also 'very beautiful' is acceptable but 'they are very beautiful' matches plural subject.

× It's dependent on the view of the area and what is the area have most.

✓ It depends on the view of the area and what the area has most of.

Awkward structure: use 'depends on' rather than 'is dependent on' for natural speech. 'What is the area have most' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'what the area has most of' to indicate the dominant features. Maintain present simple tense for general preference.

× I like the view with the beautiful trees and green area.

✓ I like views with beautiful trees and green areas.

Use plural nouns to match general preference ('views', 'areas'). Remove the definite article 'the' because you are speaking generally. 'Green area' should be pluralized to 'green areas' or rephrased as 'greenery'. This makes the sentence more natural.

× I prefer views in my country because I know which place has a beautiful views and in what time will the view be a very beautiful and nice.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I know which places have beautiful views and when the views will be at their best.

Mixes singular and plural incorrectly: use 'places' and 'views' consistently in plural. 'A beautiful views' is wrong; remove 'a' and use plural noun. Reword 'in what time will the view be a very beautiful and nice' to 'when the views will be at their best' for natural phrasing and correct word order. Use present simple knowledge verb 'know' appropriately.