Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và mạch câu: tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: “a sunrise” và “sunrise” lặp), sửa lỗi chia động từ và giới từ (ví dụ: “taking picture” → “taking pictures”, “help me re remember at the moment” → “help me remember the moment”). Giữ câu ngắn gọn (tối đa 3–4 câu), dùng liên từ hợp lý để nối ý. Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về một ví dụ lần chụp ảnh để tăng tính minh họa.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing sunsets and sunrises because the vivid colors create a unique atmosphere. For example, last summer I took photos of a golden sunset at the seaside, and the warm light made the scene very memorable.

提案: Sửa lỗi lặp từ và ngữ pháp, dùng cấu trúc câu gọn hơn: tránh lặp từ như “I I” hay “countryside countryside” và chọn từ chính xác (“during sunshine” → “at sunrise” or “in sunny weather”). Thêm liên từ hoặc cụm mô tả để giải thích hơn vì sao bạn thích nông thôn và nêu ví dụ cụ thể về một cảnh chụp để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and help me feel relaxed. I especially enjoy photographing the countryside at sunrise, when soft light highlights fields and mist, creating calm and photogenic scenes.

提案: Cải thiện trật tự câu và ngữ pháp; tránh lặp từ (“my in my country”), sửa cấu trúc kém rõ ràng (“it is a very familiar with me” → “I am more familiar with them”). Nên trình bày rõ lý do (kỷ niệm, dễ tiếp cận, phong cảnh đa dạng) và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về một địa điểm để minh họa. Giữ tối đa 3 câu, mạch lạc và liên kết bằng từ nối như “because” hoặc “for example”.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I am more familiar with them and they bring back fond childhood memories. For example, I love photographing the limestone karsts in my region because they remind me of family trips and offer dramatic backdrops.

× Yes, I enjoy taking picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because it follows a verb that indicates a general or habitual action (taking pictures in general). Use plural with countable nouns when referring to more than one or to the activity in general. Suggestion: Use 'pictures' for general activities or when an unspecified number is implied.

× I especially like photographing sunsets and a sunrise and a beautiful landscape when I travel or attend special events because the colors and atmosphere help me re remember at the moment.

✓ I especially like photographing sunsets, sunrises and beautiful landscapes when I travel or attend special events because the colors and atmosphere help me remember the moment.

Errors include doubled word 're remember', inconsistent singular/plural forms, and awkward article usage. Use present participle 'photographing' correctly, make parallel items plural ('sunsets, sunrises, landscapes'), and 'remember the moment' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: Keep items parallel and avoid duplicate words; use 'remember the moment' rather than 're remember at the moment'.

× I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and help me feel calm and relax.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and help me feel calm and relaxed.

The verb phrase 'feel calm and relax' mixes an adjective 'calm' with the base verb 'relax'. After 'feel' use adjectives describing state: 'relaxed'. Suggestion: Use 'relaxed' to match 'calm' as adjectives describing how you feel.

× I I also enjoy taking photos of the countryside countryside especially during sunshine sunrise.

✓ I also enjoy taking photos of the countryside, especially at sunrise.

Repeated words ('I I', 'countryside countryside') and awkward phrase 'during sunshine sunrise' create incorrect structure. Use 'at sunrise' for the time and remove duplicates. Suggestion: Eliminate repeated words and use 'at sunrise' or 'in the sunshine' depending on intended meaning.

× I prefer views in my own country because it is a very familiar with me and it's a memorable when I was young and so my in my country there are it have many views beautiful.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because it is very familiar to me and it is memorable from when I was young, and my country has many beautiful views.

Multiple pronoun and article errors: 'familiar with me' should be 'familiar to me'; 'it's a memorable when I was young' should be 'it is memorable from when I was young'; word order 'my in my country there are it have many views beautiful' should be 'my country has many beautiful views.' Suggestion: Use 'familiar to me', 'memorable from when I was young', and correct subject-verb order 'my country has many beautiful views.'