Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, word choice and sentence structure. Keep answers natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using linking words. Correct common errors: use plural/singular forms (pictures, words → views), correct verbs (take pictures, photograph landmarks or skylines), and avoid redundant phrases.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I like to document my life. For example, I often photograph famous landmarks and city skylines when I travel, so I can remember how each place looked. Also, I sometimes edit the best photos and share them with friends online.

提案: Focus on clear vocabulary and logical linking. Start with a direct preference sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Replace incorrect words (wares → scenery, on there and there → there) and remove unclear phrases ("It's made me care"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because the natural scenery helps me relax and reduce stress. For example, when I visit the countryside I enjoy walking by rivers and forests, which is much quieter than the city and allows me to unwind.

提案: Remove unnecessary words and correct vocabulary and grammar. Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with specific details and a brief reason. Correct nouns (wears → views, bro → has, Wales → places/nature, saw → see) and complete the thought. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: I prefer views in my own country because Hong Kong offers a striking combination of city skyline and natural scenery. For example, I can see the famous skyline from Victoria Harbour and also visit nearby country parks for hiking and sea views.

× Yes, I enjoy taking picture of different words because I want to document my life.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different places because I want to document my life.

The learner used the singular noun 'picture' where the plural 'pictures' is needed (Grammar Problem Type ID 1: singular and plural issue). Also 'words' is incorrect in context; the intended meaning is 'places' or 'views' which requires correct noun choice (falls under noun selection but treated here as plural correction). Suggestion: use 'pictures' when referring to multiple photographs and 'places' or 'views' for locations.

× For example, I always photograph of landmark or city sky, view skyline.

✓ For example, I always photograph landmarks or the city skyline.

The verb 'photograph' should not be followed by the preposition 'of' here (Grammar Problem Type ID 11: incorrect use of prepositions). Also 'landmark' should be plural 'landmarks' to match 'always' and general meaning (Grammar Problem Type ID 1). 'City sky, view skyline' is ungrammatical; 'the city skyline' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: remove the unnecessary 'of', pluralize 'landmarks' when speaking generally, and use the fixed phrase 'the city skyline'.

× I prefer rural areas more because the natural wares let me feel relaxed and I can release my stress on there and there without people.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the natural areas make me feel relaxed and I can relieve my stress there without people.

'More' is redundant with 'prefer' (could be considered sentence structure but tied to usage). 'Wares' is wrong word choice; use 'areas' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11: incorrect use of prepositions/word choice). 'Let me feel relaxed' is awkward; 'make me feel relaxed' is natural (Grammar Problem Type ID 13: incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs). 'Release my stress on there and there' is incorrect preposition and repetition; use 'relieve my stress there' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). Suggestion: avoid redundant 'more' after 'prefer', use 'make' for causing feelings, and use 'relieve' for reducing stress; 'there' is correct for 'in that place'.

× It's made me care.

✓ It helps me relax.

'It's made me care' is ungrammatical and unclear (Grammar Problem Type ID 26: sentence structure errors). Likely intended meaning is that rural areas help the speaker relax or make them care less about stress; 'It helps me relax' is a clear, grammatical sentence in present tense matching the context. Suggestion: express cause-effect with 'helps me' or 'makes me' plus an adjective or verb (e.g., 'makes me feel calm').

× Please I prefer wears in my own country because Hong Kong bro have a city skyline and natural Wales and I can saw the city skyline from Victoria harbour and.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because Hong Kong has a city skyline and natural areas, and I can see the city skyline from Victoria Harbour.

Multiple errors: 'Please' is unnecessary; remove it. 'Wears' is incorrect word choice; 'views' is intended (Grammar Problem Type ID 12: incorrect use of pronouns/word choice). 'Hong Kong bro have' has plural verb and incorrect noun; should be 'Hong Kong has' (Grammar Problem Type ID 27: subject-verb agreement and ID 2: third person singular issue). 'Natural Wales' is wrong word choice; 'natural areas' fits context (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'I can saw' uses past tense 'saw' incorrectly; should be present 'see' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6: present tense issue / 5 past tense issue). Also 'Victoria harbour' capitalization and fixed name should be 'Victoria Harbour'. Suggestion: use correct nouns ('views', 'areas'), match third-person singular verbs with singular subjects ('Hong Kong has'), and use present tense 'see' when describing what you can currently observe.