Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your true preference (or balance) and give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid filler words like "uh" and repetitions.

例: I enjoy both typing and handwriting, but if I had to choose I prefer typing because it's faster and easier to edit. For example, when I write essays or emails on my laptop I can quickly correct mistakes and rearrange sentences.

提案: Be organized and reduce hesitations. Give a single clear statement about what you use daily, then add a specific example and a linking word to support it.

例: I type mainly on my laptop and sometimes on my phone, but I rarely use a desktop. For instance, I draft most of my school assignments on a laptop, and I quickly reply to messages on my phone when I'm away from home.

提案: Provide a concise time reference and a clear sequence of events. Use linking words like "when" or "because" and finish your sentences. Include one specific detail about what you practiced.

例: I learned to type when I was about eight years old at school because our IT teacher gave us extra practice during lunch. For example, I spent those sessions typing short stories and poems, which helped me get faster and more confident.

提案: Be specific about your practice methods and avoid fillers. State one main method and give a concrete example or routine with a linking word like "for example" or "for instance."

例: I improve my typing mainly through regular practice; for instance, I write short stories and emails every day for about 20 minutes. Additionally, I use online typing exercises once a week to work on accuracy and speed.

× Uh, I prefer typing as well as handwriting. I don't have any preferences. I love doing it both.

✓ I prefer both typing and handwriting. I don't have a preference; I enjoy doing both.

The original uses awkward pronoun and phrase choices ('doing it both') and a plural 'preferences' which is unnatural here. Use 'both' with the two activities and singular 'preference' to indicate no single favorite. This improves clarity and naturalness.

× Well I type on laptops on my phones.

✓ Well, I type on laptops and on my phone.

Using 'on' twice with different devices is acceptable but 'on my phones' is incorrect because 'phone' should be singular when referring to the student's device. Also replace the second 'on' with 'and on' for parallel structure and add a comma after 'Well' for natural speech pacing.

× For example if I were to type emails I do it on my phone or laptops.

✓ For example, when I type emails I do it on my phone or on my laptop.

The original mixes conditional 'if I were to' with a habitual present 'I do it', which is inconsistent. Use 'when I type emails' to express habitual action and make device number consistent: 'phone' singular and 'laptop' singular with 'on' repeated for clarity.

× Well I usually don't use desktop.

✓ Well, I usually don't use a desktop.

A countable noun like 'desktop (computer)' requires an article. Use 'a desktop' to be grammatically correct.

× Well, I was a kid back then.

✓ Well, I was a kid back then.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable in context as past reference; no correction needed. Included here to show it matches tense requirements.

× We used to get excited for our IT class during especially during lunch hours.

✓ We used to get especially excited for our IT class during lunch hours.

Original has redundant 'during' and incorrect word order. Move 'especially' before 'excited' and remove the extra 'during' to create a natural adverb placement.

× So our IT teacher would give us opportunity to type anything we like.

✓ So our IT teacher would give us the opportunity to type anything we liked.

Use the article 'the' with 'opportunity' and keep past tense consistent ('liked') to match 'would give' and the past time frame.

× So I write, I used to write stories, poems, and.

✓ I used to write stories and poems.

The original is fragmented and mixes present and past forms ('I write, I used to'). Consolidate to past tense 'used to' to indicate a past habit and remove the trailing conjunction. This yields a complete sentence.

× Well, I believe practice matters the most, so I usually type, uh, stories, you know, worms and uh, different.

✓ Well, I believe practice matters most, so I usually type stories, short pieces, and different kinds of writing.

'Worms' is likely a mispronunciation; replace with 'short pieces' or similar. Remove filler words and ensure noun phrases complete the idea. 'Practice matters most' is more idiomatic than 'the most.'

× Sometimes I see myself typing emails, so it's naturally improving my skills on typing.

✓ Sometimes I find myself typing emails, so it naturally improves my typing skills.

Use 'find myself' for natural expression; 'it's naturally improving' shifts aspect awkwardly—use simple present 'improves' for habitual effect. 'Improve my typing skills' is the correct noun phrase rather than 'skills on typing.'