Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise and correct grammar (e.g., remove extra words and fix comparative forms). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words (e.g., because, so) but avoid redundancy.

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because it’s faster and more efficient. For example, typing lets me edit and save documents quickly, which is useful for school and work, so I can finish tasks much sooner.

提案: This answer is clear and coherent but can be tightened. Begin with a direct topic sentence and combine similar reasons to avoid repetition. Use one linking word to show contrast or reason.

例: I usually type on a laptop keyboard because laptops are portable. Since I can carry a laptop anywhere, I use it far more often than a bulky desktop.

提案: Correct grammar and simplify the timeline expression. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the age, then add a specific context. Avoid awkward phrases like 'while I was from'.

例: I learned to type when I was about ten, while I was in elementary school in Beijing. Back then we had compulsory typing classes, so I practiced regularly at school.

提案: Provide a complete grammatical sentence, give a concrete method and timeline, and use linking words properly. Mention a specific practice routine or tool to make the answer more precise.

例: I improved my typing through daily practice and drills. For example, I spent 20–30 minutes each evening using typing exercises and the encouraging feedback from my teacher helped me build speed and accuracy over several weeks.

× I prefer typing over handwriting because typing is much more faster and efficient than handwriting, and furthermore my handwriting is not very good.

✓ I prefer typing over handwriting because typing is much faster and more efficient than handwriting, and furthermore my handwriting is not very good.

Use of 'more faster' is incorrect because 'faster' is already the comparative form; combine 'more' with adjectives that do not have comparative forms. Also use parallel structure 'much faster and more efficient' for clarity. Suggestion: remove 'more' before 'faster' and add 'more' before 'efficient' to keep parallelism.

× I'm too embarrassed to show my handwriting.

✓ I am too embarrassed to show my handwriting.

Contraction is acceptable in speech, but for written formal correction expand to 'I am' if formality is required. Pronoun use is correct; this suggestion is optional stylistic change. (No grammatical error other than register.)

× I usually type on the laptop keyboard, not a desktop keyboard.

✓ I usually type on a laptop keyboard, not a desktop keyboard.

Using 'the laptop keyboard' implies a specific one; general preference should use 'a laptop keyboard'. Change to 'a' for generic reference.

× I don't use desktop computers very often because desktop computers are too big, whereas for laptop computers I can carry them everywhere.

✓ I don't use desktop computers very often because desktop computers are too big, whereas I can carry laptop computers everywhere.

Awkward placement 'for laptop computers I can carry them everywhere' is grammatically odd. Keep noun phrase placement consistent; maintain plural 'computers' but reposition subject 'I' before verb. Alternatively use 'my laptop' singular. Suggestion: 'whereas I can carry a laptop everywhere.'

× I learned to type on the keyboard while I was from 10 years old, while I was still a Beijing elementary school student.

✓ I learned to type on the keyboard when I was 10 years old, while I was still a Beijing elementary school student.

Use 'when I was 10 years old' rather than 'while I was from 10 years old'; 'from' is incorrect with age. 'While' pairs with a clause, but 'when' indicates age/time of learning.

× There was compulsory typing classes back then.

✓ There were compulsory typing classes back then.

Subject 'typing classes' is plural, so the verb 'to be' must be plural: 'were' not 'was'. Use subject-verb agreement.

× Improve my typing by current practice.

✓ I improved my typing through regular practice.

Original lacks a subject and uses incorrect word order 'current practice'. Use past tense 'improved' to match narration and 'through regular practice' for natural expression. Ensure sentences have subject and correct verb form.

× The teacher back then was very encouraging, although it was not easy in the 1st place, but then I got used to it after days and days of of constant practice.

✓ The teacher back then was very encouraging; although it was not easy at first, I got used to it after days and days of constant practice.

Use 'at first' rather than 'in the 1st place'. Avoid redundant conjunctions 'although' and 'but' together; choose one and use proper punctuation. Also remove duplicate 'of'. Maintain past tense consistency.