Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and tense/number errors.

例: I prefer handwriting to typing. Firstly, I find screens strain my eyes and neck, so writing by hand is more comfortable. Secondly, handwriting helps me organize my thoughts more clearly, especially when I’m planning or taking notes.

提案: Remove fillers and produce a structured answer: topic sentence then 1–2 reasons with linking words. Clarify comparisons and avoid vague, repetitive phrases.

例: I usually type on a desktop at work because I have a personal computer in my office. However, I use a laptop at home since it is more portable and convenient for working in different rooms or when travelling.

提案: Organize chronologically and correct grammar. Give specific time, tools learned, and avoid vague statements. Use linking words like 'then' and 'later' to show sequence.

例: I started learning to type during my university years when my father gave me a personal computer for my birthday. At first I taught myself using Word, Excel and PowerPoint, but I never had formal typing lessons. Recently, my son introduced me to a typing app to improve my speed.

提案: Be precise and concise: state method, frequency, and measurable result. Avoid overstatements and awkward expressions. Use linking words like 'as a result' or 'therefore' to connect improvement to practice.

例: I practise typing with a mobile app for about 15 minutes every day. As a result, my accuracy and speed have improved noticeably within a week, and I can now touch-type without looking at the keyboard.

× I always choose handwriting over typing on the computer or in the mobile phone because I am not that tech savvy person.

✓ I always choose handwriting over typing on the computer or on my mobile phone because I am not that tech-savvy a person.

'tech savvy' should be hyphenated as 'tech-savvy' when used as a compound adjective before a noun; when preceded by 'that' and followed by a noun, the pattern 'that tech-savvy a person' (or 'that tech-savvy') is more natural. Also use 'on my mobile phone' for correct preposition and possessive use (see preposition/pronoun usage).

× Moreover, I feel a strain in my eyes and neck when I look at screen and type the words and if I choose handwriting it help me to write more clearly.

✓ Moreover, I feel strain in my eyes and neck when I look at the screen and type, and if I choose handwriting it helps me write more clearly.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'screen'. The verb 'help' needs third person singular agreement as 'helps'. Remove unnecessary 'the words' after 'type' and unnecessary 'to' after 'helps' when followed by a bare infinitive for clarity and natural style.

× Most of the time I type on a desktop because I have my own personal computer in my office.

✓ Most of the time I type on a desktop because I have my own personal computer in my office.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. (Kept present simple to match habitual action.)

× Uh, moreover, I use laptop at home only because, uh, it, it is more convenient to take laptop here and there, whereas in the office, uh, and in mobile devices required, so it can be used by everybody, uh.

✓ Moreover, I use a laptop only at home because it is more convenient to take my laptop here and there, while in the office many people use desktop computers, and mobile devices are used when required.

Fixed article usage ('a laptop', 'my laptop'), removed filler words and broken structure, clarified contrasts with 'while', and rephrased the final clause for clarity and grammatical completeness. Ensures subject-verb agreement and appropriate noun phrases.

× During my graduation day, I was gifted my personal computer by my father on my birthday and that time I started using Microsoft XLS well as PowerPoint.

✓ During my graduation, my father gifted me a personal computer on my birthday, and at that time I started using Microsoft Excel as well as PowerPoint.

Use 'gifted me' as correct active voice and position of indirect object. 'Graduation day' is better as 'graduation' and 'Microsoft XLS' should be 'Microsoft Excel'. Add 'as well as' for correct conjunction and include articles where needed.

× I didn't have any formal training about typing.

✓ I didn't have any formal training in typing.

Use 'training in' rather than 'training about' for correct preposition collocation.

× Moreover, I cannot type by following rule and regulation.

✓ Moreover, I cannot type following rules and regulations.

Remove 'by' which is unnecessary here, pluralize 'rules and regulations' for natural collocation, and use present ability 'cannot' with gerund 'following'.

× Just recently, my son introduced me app.

✓ Just recently, my son introduced me to an app.

Add preposition 'to' after 'introduced' when indicating what someone was introduced to, and include the article 'an' before 'app'.

× These days I'm using app and almost spending 15 minutes on it every day and I'm very consistent that my performance has improved within a week and the speed has got almost doubled.

✓ These days I'm using an app and spending about 15 minutes on it every day, and I'm very consistent, so my performance has improved within a week and my speed has almost doubled.

Add article 'an' before 'app'. Use 'spending about' for natural adverb placement. Replace awkward 'I'm very consistent that' with 'I'm very consistent, so' to show cause and effect. Use 'my speed has almost doubled' for clearer possessive and natural phrasing.

× Now I can type without looking at the keyboard.

✓ Now I can type without looking at the keyboard.

Sentence is correct; present ability expressed with 'can' and gerund 'looking' is appropriate.

× This is one of the striking point regarding this.

✓ This is one of the striking points regarding that.

Use plural 'points' after 'one of the', and 'regarding that' or better 'about this' improves clarity. Original had singular/plural mismatch and vague reference.