Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise, and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give a specific reason or example. Replace phrases like "if we handwriting" with "when I handwrite" and avoid capitalizing mid-sentence.

例: I prefer handwriting because it lets me combine notes and sketches easily. For example, when I study, I draw diagrams and annotate them by hand, which helps me remember concepts better.

提案: Eliminate hesitations and repetitions, and use correct articles and word order. Start with a direct statement, then give a brief reason with a linking word like "because" or "so". Use "a/an" and correct forms (e.g., "an undergraduate student").

例: I type on a laptop keyboard every day because I am an undergraduate student and I always carry my laptop in my backpack. Therefore, using the laptop keyboard is more convenient for me.

提案: Avoid fillers and repetition, use past tense accurately, and give a concise reason or brief detail. Replace informal or incorrect phrases like "I didn't run it from teachers" with "I didn't learn it from teachers".

例: I learned to type when I was in kindergarten. I picked it up naturally at home by using the family computer rather than from formal lessons.

提案: Be specific about methods and use clear sequencing words. Avoid repetition and filler phrases like "to be honest" or "so many times." Mention concrete activities (e.g., online exercises, timed tests) and use past or present tense consistently.

例: I improved my typing by practicing regularly. For example, I used online typing exercises and timed tests every evening until my speed and accuracy improved.

× I prefer handwriting because if we handwriting something then we can draw and write anything whatever we want.

✓ I prefer handwriting because if we handwrite something then we can draw and write anything we want.

The verb 'handwriting' is incorrectly used as a noun where the verb form 'handwrite' (base form) or its gerund might be required. This is a verb form error (present participle vs base). Use 'handwrite' after the auxiliary 'we' ('we handwrite') or use the gerund 'handwriting' as a noun in a different structure. Also remove the redundant 'whatever' after 'anything'. Suggestion: use 'if we handwrite something' or 'when handwriting something'.

× So I usually feel free when I write something and Draw Something.

✓ So I usually feel free when I write something and draw something.

The word 'Draw' is incorrectly capitalized in the middle of the sentence; English uses lowercase for common verbs. This is an orthographic error affecting readability. Also avoid repeating 'something' twice; you could say 'when I write or draw' for conciseness. Note: capitalization errors are treated here under general sentence structure/usage considerations.

× I'm on undergraduate student so I always bring laptop on my backpack.

✓ I'm an undergraduate student so I always bring my laptop in my backpack.

Missing article 'an' before 'undergraduate student' (article error related to singular noun). 'Laptop' needs a possessive 'my' and the preposition should be 'in' not 'on'. Issues: singular noun requires an article; possession and preposition mistakes corrected. Suggestion: 'I'm an undergraduate student, so I always bring my laptop in my backpack.'

× I I always type on laptop keyboard every day because I'm on undergraduate student so I always bring laptop on my backpack.

✓ I always type on my laptop keyboard every day because I'm an undergraduate student, so I always bring my laptop in my backpack.

Repeated 'I' is a speech repetition error; also missing article 'my' for 'laptop keyboard', article 'an' for 'undergraduate student', and 'in' is the correct preposition for 'backpack'. These are subject-verb/article/preposition issues that affect clarity. Suggestion: remove repetitions and add necessary articles and possessives.

× So using using using laptop keyboard is much comfortable to me.

✓ So using a laptop keyboard is much more comfortable for me.

The repeated 'using' is a false start/repetition. 'Much comfortable' is incorrect collocation; use 'much more comfortable' or simply 'more comfortable'. Preposition should be 'for me'. Suggestion: 'Using a laptop keyboard is much more comfortable for me.'

× Oh, I guess when I was when I was a kindergarten student, I learned how to type on keyboard.

✓ Oh, I guess when I was a kindergarten student, I learned how to type on the keyboard.

The sentence repeats 'when I was' (repetition). Also missing article 'the' before 'keyboard'. The past tense 'learned' is correct; only repetition and article issues fixed. Suggestion: avoid repeating and include 'the keyboard'.

× I think I learned it naturally. I didn't run it from teachers or took some courses.

✓ I think I learned it naturally. I didn't learn it from teachers or take any courses.

'Didn't' requires the base verb form: use 'learn' not 'run' or 'took'. 'Took' should be base 'take' after 'didn't'. Also 'any courses' is more natural. Suggestion: use the base form after 'didn't' and correct verb choice.

× To be to be honest, I practiced it a lot so many times.

✓ To be honest, I practiced it many times.

Repeated phrase 'to be to be' is a speech error. 'So many times' is less natural than 'many times' or 'so many times' could be used but combined with 'a lot' is redundant. Suggestion: choose one: 'I practiced it a lot' or 'I practiced it many times.'

× I mean when I was young I didn't type well, so I sometimes envied my friend.

✓ I mean when I was young I didn't type well, so I sometimes envied my friends.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if referring generally; if referring to one friend, include an article or possessive. The tense 'didn't type' is correctly past. Suggestion: use 'friends' for general comparison or specify 'my friend' with more context.

× So when I came back to home and I practiced typing so many times.

✓ So when I came back home, I practiced typing many times.

Remove unnecessary preposition 'to' in 'came back home' (or use 'came back to my home'). The conjunction 'and' is unnecessary because the time clause already connects the actions; punctuation helps. 'So many times' becomes 'many times' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: 'When I came back home, I practiced typing many times.'